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Subtly Rough
Cognitive images drew intense murals of his hands
grasping hips that gently shifted downward
gripping, then gyrated atop his powerful symbol
where the snugness of my sanctuary was tailor-made for his
regal perfection, all the while I was painting his throbbing mischief
with my feverish hysteria.
I wanted it rough, raw and chaotic enough to be
force fed the full throttle of thick.
Lips eagerly waiting for his widened smile,
tongue aching with anticipation to taste his essence,
while my larynx begged for his liquid surrender to…
coat my throat, smoothly.
Head held with such tenderness pulling it in unison
with every thrusts I greedily accepted.
Humming on his majestic eagerness.
His groans created an admired melody…. startling an
atmosphere that never heard the sounds of a passionate
composition being born.
Retracting from symphony slurps and joyful gags of reflex…
the only time I was content and comfortable with no air.
I could feel his stare,
as I licked every inch of what was once taboo.
Fortifying my position, subtle submission
joining of souls pleasing each other in formation,
where both pair of my lips were being utilized-
passionately, simultaneously.
Every time he licked the seam of my wet promise
he could taste my antiquity living there.
And every time I drew him in like carnal nicotine,
sucked and puff as his glaze settled in the corners of my mouth
like an perennial edge I would never forget,
I could feel myself getting high, staying wasted,
and becoming addicted to wanting it….
rough....
yet, subtle.
Rain~
author note: For comp! ( Some may recognize the similarities from my poem.... )
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/222862-sometimes-i-like-it-rough/
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Re. Subtly Rough
24th Jul 2016 5:29am
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30th Jul 2016 5:02am
Re. Subtly Rough
24th Jul 2016 5:53am
I've seen the competition in question
This is as creative as those I've seen
Better than good dear Rain xx
This is as creative as those I've seen
Better than good dear Rain xx
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Re: Re. Subtly Rough
30th Jul 2016 5:03am
Re. Subtly Rough
24th Jul 2016 6:09am
fermented intent marinating
through controlled pressure
deliberate in delivery
as grown folk
frolic freely swapping
symbolic offerings of affection
inflicted by oral inquisitions
licked pulled
squeezed and sucked..
ravenous in reciprocity..
a sensuous sharing
of the late night afflicted
shared amongst the
poetic peeping toms
as we visualize
the intense scenery
you so eloquently spilled
through the extravagance
of your quill..
tantalizing vibe
you got goin here Rain..
through controlled pressure
deliberate in delivery
as grown folk
frolic freely swapping
symbolic offerings of affection
inflicted by oral inquisitions
licked pulled
squeezed and sucked..
ravenous in reciprocity..
a sensuous sharing
of the late night afflicted
shared amongst the
poetic peeping toms
as we visualize
the intense scenery
you so eloquently spilled
through the extravagance
of your quill..
tantalizing vibe
you got goin here Rain..
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My goodness, that was an exquisite, sexy, sensual poetic response and such a damn turn-on. ;)
Lawd Naajir, amazing pen! This made me... um....
Thank you!
Lawd Naajir, amazing pen! This made me... um....
Thank you!
Re. Subtly Rough
24th Jul 2016 1:32pm
Great entry, Rain. It's beautiful when two are so in sync they settle like foundations within themselves and each other.
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Re: Re. Subtly Rough
30th Jul 2016 5:14am
...indeed, Ahavati, there's a spiritual bliss in loving making when both are in sync; mind, body and spirit.
Thank you! :)
Thank you! :)
Re. Subtly Rough
Anonymous
24th Jul 2016 4:31pm
oh wow reading this felt like a sinful indulgence, almost like a voyeurism, in bated breath.
Good luck in the comp Rain but then you are a winner in my book.
Good luck in the comp Rain but then you are a winner in my book.
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Re: Re. Subtly Rough
30th Jul 2016 5:16am
That was such a lovely comment, Vee! Thank you for shining your positive light on my page.
Appreciate you greaty! xo
Appreciate you greaty! xo
Re. Subtly Rough
24th Jul 2016 9:04pm
... now how in the hell am I supposed to make it through the rest of the day after consuming that in the afternoon? lol, yo poetry on point as per usual,
"joining of souls pleasing each other in formation,
where both pair of my lips were being utilized-
passionately, simultaneously." ... my mind begs for mercy...
"joining of souls pleasing each other in formation,
where both pair of my lips were being utilized-
passionately, simultaneously." ... my mind begs for mercy...
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Re: Re. Subtly Rough
30th Jul 2016 5:20am
"... now how in the hell am I supposed to make it through the rest of the day after consuming that in the afternoon?" <--- you weren't! lol.. Love your comment, thanks Dean... :)
Re. Subtly Rough
25th Jul 2016 00:52am
My dearest Rain,
I must admit, You have me ready to get in formation😊. This was simply amazing and sexy and everything in between. Beautiful
I must admit, You have me ready to get in formation😊. This was simply amazing and sexy and everything in between. Beautiful
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Re: Re. Subtly Rough
30th Jul 2016 5:25am
...well gone girl and slay so you can get information. ;)
Thank you so much Vivid for always making me smile... xo
Thank you so much Vivid for always making me smile... xo
Re. Subtly Rough
25th Jul 2016 7:11pm
Classic eroticism, Rain. The title might seem like an oxymoron but I think you're lady enough to have it both ways:
"His groans created an admired melody…. startling an
atmosphere that never heard the sounds of a passionate
composition being born."
That composition then acquires steam, these being my favorite lines:
"Fortifying my position, subtle submission
joining of souls pleasing each other in formation,
where both pair of my lips were being utilized-
passionately, simultaneously.
Every time he licked the seam of my wet promise
he could taste my antiquity living there."
Incredible word choice, with "promise" and "antiquity" putting certain elements in a whole new light. Highly intelligent and VERY stimulating work Rain!
"His groans created an admired melody…. startling an
atmosphere that never heard the sounds of a passionate
composition being born."
That composition then acquires steam, these being my favorite lines:
"Fortifying my position, subtle submission
joining of souls pleasing each other in formation,
where both pair of my lips were being utilized-
passionately, simultaneously.
Every time he licked the seam of my wet promise
he could taste my antiquity living there."
Incredible word choice, with "promise" and "antiquity" putting certain elements in a whole new light. Highly intelligent and VERY stimulating work Rain!
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30th Jul 2016 5:35am
This response was so good reading; like when you're drinking wine and eating juicy tender steak and it taste so dang good that you have to mmm through swallows. lol... (I have no clue where the heck I was going with that.) lmao
I just adore reading that extra effort you put into replies. Thank you Crow, and appreciate you keeping her...
I just adore reading that extra effort you put into replies. Thank you Crow, and appreciate you keeping her...
Re. Subtly Rough
26th Jul 2016 8:46am
jesus take the wheel
& drive me to a booty call
*
oh my stars & garters
rainy lady, you have
outdone yourself here,
subtly {& suitably} rough
indeed
the sapiosexual in me delights in this
loved it
best of luck in the comp
xoxox
& drive me to a booty call
*
oh my stars & garters
rainy lady, you have
outdone yourself here,
subtly {& suitably} rough
indeed
the sapiosexual in me delights in this
loved it
best of luck in the comp
xoxox
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Re: Re. Subtly Rough
30th Jul 2016 5:40am
"jesus take the wheel
& drive me to a booty call " <---- Lmfao! Hilarious!
Dancedoll, that vibrant personality and wit of yours.... always make me wanna' hug you after reading your comments and poetry.
Thanks beautiful, appreciate you keeping her....xo
& drive me to a booty call " <---- Lmfao! Hilarious!
Dancedoll, that vibrant personality and wit of yours.... always make me wanna' hug you after reading your comments and poetry.
Thanks beautiful, appreciate you keeping her....xo
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Anonymous
26th Jul 2016 9:32pm
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30th Jul 2016 5:42am
Re. Subtly Rough
27th Jul 2016 4:27pm
Loving the word play and the flow..... Very sensual but classy with a lot of eroticism.... Very nice Rain.....
~BSavvy
~BSavvy
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Re: Re. Subtly Rough
30th Jul 2016 5:45am
I really was aiming for your exact expression, B! So pleased I hit the mark in your eyes, thank you so much! :)
Re. Subtly Rough
28th Jul 2016 3:40am
Simply put amazing ,erotic , mature and extremely arousing. #subtlyperverse #firestarter
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Re: Re. Subtly Rough
30th Jul 2016 5:46am
A man that knows and appreciate the sensual way I write! Appreciate you Archie! Thanks hun! xo
Re. Subtly Rough
Anonymous
1st Aug 2016 2:13am
You're amazing.. Rain is raining luscious lustful thunderstorms.. keep it going.. wonderful write..
Dave
Dave
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Re: Re. Subtly Rough
1st Aug 2016 2:47am
...thank you Dave, the hotter my mind, the hotter the ink... ;) Appreciate your ink-love...
Re. Subtly Rough
4th Aug 2016 00:56am
Well written with effective word plays and palpable imagery... This one is a hidden gem in this category that I'm glad I found, love to read more.....
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Thank you Revenge! :) It's so nice to see a new face brightening up my page with such sweet charm. xo
Re. Subtly Rough
7th Jan 2017 6:35am
Your mad fingers deeply entrenched into my hips
With swollen erect open pores feeling your intense
Anticipation of my mad rough thrusting into your
Hot sensual hungry mouth made my rob throb
Like a jack hammer out of control in full throttle
Making me shout my begging pleas to savor
Every inch of my perfectly custom shaped
Cock that I would suck as badly the sun
Wants to blast solar flares into the cosmos
Even more to fill your succulent mouth with
My sweetest creamy cum lacing your sensual
Lips longing to envelope my desiring tongue
Tasting every drop of nectar you crave so
Badly and so deserving my blast like a raging
Volcano in the month of May!
With swollen erect open pores feeling your intense
Anticipation of my mad rough thrusting into your
Hot sensual hungry mouth made my rob throb
Like a jack hammer out of control in full throttle
Making me shout my begging pleas to savor
Every inch of my perfectly custom shaped
Cock that I would suck as badly the sun
Wants to blast solar flares into the cosmos
Even more to fill your succulent mouth with
My sweetest creamy cum lacing your sensual
Lips longing to envelope my desiring tongue
Tasting every drop of nectar you crave so
Badly and so deserving my blast like a raging
Volcano in the month of May!
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