Eternal Darkness

vampire girl, seductive dangerous beauty.
the kind a man can't resist, Crim...

thank you John..

love Crim

I like your poem, Brenda..  
 
Critique:  
 
However, Nosferatu is a higher level vampire so to speak and are supposed to have the ability heal, turn into mist, and to fight the urge to feed, so the cannot wait part is a little questionable. I'm guessing Hades is brushed up on his vampire lore if you know what I mean... ;)  
 
Just say'n...  ;)  
 
Enjoyed,  
 
-ed

thank you Ed the comment and critique I edited accordingly :)

I have to admit to being a wanna be goth..

love Brenda

Always enjoy Vampires 😁 Great write

thank you kindly DC :)

love Crim

Crim, I love a good vampire tale and this one's a beaut.

"she is on the hunt again  
crucifix upon her wall  
keeps not ravishing bloodlust at bay  
she is vampire her hunger will not wait"

Maybe a silver crucifix might work, but I'd still succumb in a heart beat.  Then my own bloodlust will be coming to a boil.  Loved this!  
   

thank you Sir Crow made me smile with your comment :)

love Crim

My Beautiful Brenda, I have to say when I read this, many things crossed my mind, interesting similarities (you know what I mean here, I know you do) and in its entirety, this blew me away...leaving me speechless...

"seducing me taken to her inner chambers  
drinking my body dry as she rides  
   
before taking my last breath  
I hear her reciting the rosary  
chanting for heaven to receive me  
blood dripping from her fangs as she prays  
   
she slips out into the darkness  
that receives her well  
walking among the tombstones  
of past lovers she grieves    
   
rosary beads against pale milky flesh  
ruby lips, raven hair  
can you deny her anything?"
~ these lines lovely one!! LOVE LOVE LOVE!!

I love you

xoxo Taryn

my beautiful one I must have been thinking about our conversations on an another level when I wrote this..

so happy you liked it..

I love you so much..

xoxo Brenda

This tale of sorts
Finds desires of its wake
Dismissive thwarts
Find me before daybreak
:-)

<3 dkruie

thank you Dkruie for a lovely poetic comment :)

love Crim

Brenda.. i can tell what inspired this.. Type O Negative.. i'm guessing Christian Woman.. killer write.. really loved what the song inspired you to write.. simply brilliant.. love you!!



Dave

you're too good Dave yes that is indeed the song that inspired this..

thank you for a great comment..

I love you my brother..

xoxo Brenda