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Untitled Song
Oh
Me oh my
I got stones
In my eye
How
Its plain to see
All the gravel that's kicked about
Wandering along
Like a rock leading the way
Oh
Me oh my
My feet are worn
Hard
From strolling lifes road
They say we all got soul
But its plain to see
My soles worn thin
Oh
Me oh my
My eyes grow dim
From a million sunsets
But I guess its plain to see
I still got a few more
Sunrises
Within
Published 23rd May 2016
| Edited 30th May 2016
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23rd May 2016 1:27pm
"My eyes grow dim
From a million sunsets
But I guess its plain to see
I still got a few more
Sunrises
Within me"
beautiful lyrics Carpe..
with love Brenda
From a million sunsets
But I guess its plain to see
I still got a few more
Sunrises
Within me"
beautiful lyrics Carpe..
with love Brenda
30th May 2016 5:57pm
Anonymous
23rd May 2016 1:27pm
lovely write,
sunrises within indeed.
love x
sunrises within indeed.
love x
30th May 2016 5:58pm
30th May 2016 8:28am
It's bluesy. I really like it. I might just say "within" on the last line instead of "within me". It connects with "dim" at the end of the first line in the last paragraph I think.
30th May 2016 6:03pm
Yea I think that works better after going over it. Thanks mate and glad you enjoyed it.
