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My Greetings Card
There’s no amount or array of flowers
That could affect your pungent aroma
Bathing in the most expensive perfumes
Could not cancel out your rat like stench
You could soak in the strongest disinfectant
But you would still reek of human vomit
No amount of showering or scrubbing
Could change the vile funk you emit
You release an odour of decomposition
Anything good you had, has long since died
To me your ugliness is all encompassing
An ugliness of the mind, body and spirit
You could gargle with acidic drain cleaner
Or mouth wash with thick liquid bleach
It would not affect the lies that you talk
Or the whiff of shit every time you speak
You’re an outsider of the human race
You didn’t even hear the starting pistol
You definitely put the sub into sub-human
You’re a waste of skin, an oxygen thief
Rightfully so, I begrudge your very existence
Every beat of your heart and breath you take
You have absolutely no redeeming features
Let me assure you. there’s no amount of begging
That could ever make me consider forgiving you
That could ever come close to making me forget
Your death to me would be completely ineffectual
Real justice would demand your eternal torture
My hate for you is legend and black flag extreme
You’re not a cunt you’re so much worse than that
I only worship the ground that’s coming to you
That is how much I loathe and despise you
Happy Fathers Day
That could affect your pungent aroma
Bathing in the most expensive perfumes
Could not cancel out your rat like stench
You could soak in the strongest disinfectant
But you would still reek of human vomit
No amount of showering or scrubbing
Could change the vile funk you emit
You release an odour of decomposition
Anything good you had, has long since died
To me your ugliness is all encompassing
An ugliness of the mind, body and spirit
You could gargle with acidic drain cleaner
Or mouth wash with thick liquid bleach
It would not affect the lies that you talk
Or the whiff of shit every time you speak
You’re an outsider of the human race
You didn’t even hear the starting pistol
You definitely put the sub into sub-human
You’re a waste of skin, an oxygen thief
Rightfully so, I begrudge your very existence
Every beat of your heart and breath you take
You have absolutely no redeeming features
Let me assure you. there’s no amount of begging
That could ever make me consider forgiving you
That could ever come close to making me forget
Your death to me would be completely ineffectual
Real justice would demand your eternal torture
My hate for you is legend and black flag extreme
You’re not a cunt you’re so much worse than that
I only worship the ground that’s coming to you
That is how much I loathe and despise you
Happy Fathers Day
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Re. My Greetings Card
Anonymous
19th May 2016 1:17am
Wow David....what a vent......you got to feel better after letting go of all this rage......I'm feelin you here......purple luv & hugs xo :)
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20th May 2016 10:04pm
unfortunately based in truth and truth be told I did feel better after writing this :-)
thank you for reading and understanding - e-hugs on their way :-)
thank you for reading and understanding - e-hugs on their way :-)
Re. My Greetings Card
19th May 2016 1:32am
David having read you for some time now I understand your rage..
powerful inking my friend..
sending love your way..
Brenda
powerful inking my friend..
sending love your way..
Brenda
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20th May 2016 10:05pm
on days like these understanding and even e-love are worth their weight in gold :-)
thank you my friend :-)
thank you my friend :-)
Re. My Greetings Card
19th May 2016 3:49am
Damn! You forgot to mention what crawled up his ass and died each time he farted...
JJ
JJ
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20th May 2016 10:06pm
Re. My Greetings Card
19th May 2016 5:21am
A powerful vitriolic write David...
Your anger in these words is palpable but still allows a beautiful if somewhat caustic flow to the poem...
Your anger in these words is palpable but still allows a beautiful if somewhat caustic flow to the poem...
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Re: Re. My Greetings Card
20th May 2016 10:08pm
a caustic poem from a caustic mood raised by caustic memories - what can I say :-(
still I am glad and thankful you read it and understood it :-)
still I am glad and thankful you read it and understood it :-)
Re. My Greetings Card
19th May 2016 5:50am
As I fairly recently learned....until they actually do die...is funny like weird funny not haha funny...but it brings on a hole other pain that's hard to describe
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20th May 2016 10:09pm
oh indeed - mine is a mixture of rage and the feeling of being cheated - go figure :-(
thank you for reading and understanding :-)
thank you for reading and understanding :-)
Re. My Greetings Card
19th May 2016 7:46am
Excellent rage release! Some people cannot be forgiven and more importantly like in this case don't deserve it. Honest, raw, free flowing anger. Love this hate poem! :)
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20th May 2016 10:11pm
I am strangely so glad that you love this poem - I meant every word :-)
thank you for reading and your understanding :-)
thank you for reading and your understanding :-)
Re. My Greetings Card
19th May 2016 11:13am
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20th May 2016 10:12pm
Re. My Greetings Card
19th May 2016 4:08pm
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20th May 2016 10:13pm
sometimes brutal honesty is all that's left :-(
thank you my friend for reading and commenting :-)
thank you my friend for reading and commenting :-)
Re. My Greetings Card
19th May 2016 9:07pm
Oh my goodness, i hope that was cleansing for you.
Sorry for the pain you still feel and hope it subsides in time.
Very well written as was expected, raw, powerful and disturbing.
Sorry for the pain you still feel and hope it subsides in time.
Very well written as was expected, raw, powerful and disturbing.
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Re: Re. My Greetings Card
20th May 2016 10:15pm
it was theraputic but as a man of 56 - suffering from PTSD - I find it hard to beleive that it will ever subside :-(
Re: Re. My Greetings Card
21st May 2016 12:33pm
i think it can if you want it to and work at it
but i know that when all seems dark despair can set in
When the clouds break the sun will shine through
Sorry for preaching, just wish you well
but i know that when all seems dark despair can set in
When the clouds break the sun will shine through
Sorry for preaching, just wish you well
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