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I Can't Sleep...
I can’t sleep….
I quiver within my caramel sweat…
my optics crash against my lid’s edge,
craving to become the wet adhesive
stained and stuck to your sheet’s threads.
I’m sinking inside my own pleasure spill
trying to lick pre-mature drops of your passion,
Mercifully responding to your every groan
with the uninterrupted drag of erotic sucks.
My augmented vison of mounting you
grinds the graphic for me,
flip and bounce of hair fallen over love faces,
hiding exhales while bucking the madness of your…
throbbing conceit.
Gripped waist as I reverse a thrust to calculate
my climaxes as they rise to rapture’s ceiling.
You’ve unlocked me in spots that
your John Handcock of spit…already trapped.
Got me burning from your tongue’s smile spreading
against the entrance of my pink.
I just might detonate on first lick....exploding from
the push and pull of one gentle stroke.
I just might cradle your face at the threshold of my emission
and get tipsy off of observing you sip my treason.
I can’t sleep…
because these saturated pleasantries cascading
down my inner thighs, keep blushing for just a fraction
of your swell.
Slender fingers slip and slide between folds
summoning silk walls to mold your phallic staff...
into my image.
My breathing begs for you.
My transgressions exalted because of you.
My knees bend at temptation’s alter…
Testifying that your lap and my head are yoked
by vows of nuptial desire.
Sugary….honey…cream remnants traced the memories
that braze similar to your seed
when it collides with the greed
of my hungry kiss,
I’m living off of daydreaming fumes in the midnight,
and I need your taste…your callous hands…your thick persuasion
to help me….
sleep.
Rain~
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Re. I Can't Sleep...
13th May 2016 9:07pm
Omgoodness!! Thanks a lot sweetness NOW I can't sleep thinking bout ur hunger!! lol
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Re: Re. I Can't Sleep...
14th May 2016 00:46am
lol...you can't sleep, I can't sleep....something’s gotta' give. This world ain’t right!
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14th May 2016 9:21am
Re. I Can't Sleep...
OMG, surely I am going to Hell after tasting this ink and allowing every word to seep into my soul like caramel cream filling me with the sweetest nectar ever squeezed from your forbidden fruit. Absolutely brilliant imagery spun into metaphors that made me shake from head to head to toes...
"Got me burning from your tongue’s smile spreading
against the entrance of my pink.
I just might detonate on first lick....exploding from
the push and pull of one gentle stroke.
I just might cradle your face at the threshold of my emission
and get tipsy off of observing you sip my treason"
Rraawrrrrr!
JJ
"Got me burning from your tongue’s smile spreading
against the entrance of my pink.
I just might detonate on first lick....exploding from
the push and pull of one gentle stroke.
I just might cradle your face at the threshold of my emission
and get tipsy off of observing you sip my treason"
Rraawrrrrr!
JJ
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Re: Re. I Can't Sleep...
14th May 2016 00:50am
JJ, we can go to hell together….I’m sure it will be ‘heavenly’. Sinners need love too. ha!
“surely I am going to Hell after tasting this ink and allowing every word to seep into my soul like caramel cream filling me with the sweetest nectar ever squeezed from your forbidden fruit” <---that was WET! :) Love when I stir the animal in you. Appreciate your sensual and kind remark luv. Thanks for taking her home to cuddle. xo
“surely I am going to Hell after tasting this ink and allowing every word to seep into my soul like caramel cream filling me with the sweetest nectar ever squeezed from your forbidden fruit” <---that was WET! :) Love when I stir the animal in you. Appreciate your sensual and kind remark luv. Thanks for taking her home to cuddle. xo
Re. I Can't Sleep...
13th May 2016 11:41pm
You my dear are on fire. This is melting all 23 inches of this LCD!! Slight Irony: A little while ago, had I written something this saucy, you would have called me "nasty" LOL I see that something has caused a change of heart. Spellbindingly good !
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Re: Re. I Can't Sleep...
So.... you’re calling me nasty, eh? lol… I'm kinda’ turned on by the label tho. :) I think I've always written slightly on the edge of explicit, though I’ve found myself using the word fuck a few times since re-activating my account. Never called you nasty- lol....I said I'm not a girl that cares to read words like, 'pussy, dick, cum’, repeatedly in one’s poetry. I think I’ve always told you; I like to watch porn, be the star in my own porn,… not read it. Only a handful of poets on du can pull it off to my liking. I see ya calling me out. ;) Pleased to see you hugging her for a while, MrM...
Re. I Can't Sleep...
uninterrupted drag of erotic sucks. ...is so freakin awesome....I draw you in like nicotine....your smooth smoke relaxes me...sorry just had to write that...this is so good I am going to eat it little by little with my mind...keep the rest for another time..
going on the list as soon as I have space :)
going on the list as soon as I have space :)
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Re: Re. I Can't Sleep...
14th May 2016 1:01am
“....I draw you in like nicotine....your smooth smoke relaxes me...” <----Damn, that was poetic!
I freakin’ loved it! ;)
Thank you for the lovely comment, elated at the notion….
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19th May 2016 7:28pm
Re: Re. I Can't Sleep...
22nd May 2016 7:42am
Shell!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Your presence is always missed but it feels so good when you return. :) Happy to see ya! xo
Your presence is always missed but it feels so good when you return. :) Happy to see ya! xo
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22nd Sep 2024 6:36pm
Draw you in like nicotine. That's a Hell of a line. Might borrow it sometime
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Anonymous
14th May 2016 1:47am
Rain, a very addictive and luscious write.. love the phrasing and rhymes.. brilliant ink.. much respect..
Dave
Dave
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Re: Re. I Can't Sleep...
22nd May 2016 7:40am
hey Dave, thanks for catching my play-on words with rhymes... because I'm totally not go at it, but do like to toss them around a bit every now and then. Appreciate you.
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Anonymous
14th May 2016 3:57am
Sexy Rain.......what a night cap of sexy liquor you've supplied at this bedtime hour.......mmmmmmm......yes yes.....must turn the fan on high.....whoosh whoosh......no.....that's not the fan whooshing......luv this!! Purple luv & hugs xo :)
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Re: Re. I Can't Sleep...
22nd May 2016 7:44am
lol... ".......what a night cap of sexy liquor you've supplied at this bedtime hour" <-- I love it and I'll take it! :)
Thanks pprincess! Spiritual love dear heart....xo
Thanks pprincess! Spiritual love dear heart....xo
Re. I Can't Sleep...
14th May 2016 6:28am
those are the kind of night moves to stay up for,
or drown in the dream.
love like gladiators...
or drown in the dream.
love like gladiators...
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22nd May 2016 7:46am
Re. I Can't Sleep...
14th May 2016 11:58pm
had to write fast cause the edges of the pages were burning ... beautiful erotica Queen Rain ...
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Re: Re. I Can't Sleep...
22nd May 2016 8:01am
lol...beautiful je, you do know how to make a girl smile. Adore you lovely lady...xo
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Re: Re. I Can't Sleep...
22nd May 2016 7:56am
..this is quite the compliment coming from you todski, and I must say, I'm quite elated!
""sip my treason",
that is an odd line almost as if you have betrayed yourself for the pleasures that await
that is one hell of a close, " <--- you nailed it! I'd much rather his thick force than my fingers. :)
Love your comment, thank you...
""sip my treason",
that is an odd line almost as if you have betrayed yourself for the pleasures that await
that is one hell of a close, " <--- you nailed it! I'd much rather his thick force than my fingers. :)
Love your comment, thank you...
Re. I Can't Sleep...
20th May 2016 9:21pm
because these saturated pleasantries cascading
down my inner thighs, keep blushing for just a fraction
of your swell? Wow! More more!
down my inner thighs, keep blushing for just a fraction
of your swell? Wow! More more!
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Re: Re. I Can't Sleep...
22nd May 2016 8:00am
hey KC! :) Welcome to the DU jungle! Thanks for passing through my neck of the woods and leaving nice little breadcrumbs for me to follow you back home and take a look at your poetic paintings.
Appreciate the following too...
Appreciate the following too...
Re. I Can't Sleep...
22nd May 2016 11:03pm
I also adore this part
...'I just might cradle your face at the threshold of my emission
and get tipsy off of observing you sip my treason.
I can’t sleep…
because these saturated pleasantries cascading
down my inner thighs, keep blushing for just a fraction
of your swell. '
An exquisite piece of writing that captures the moment wonderfully.
...'I just might cradle your face at the threshold of my emission
and get tipsy off of observing you sip my treason.
I can’t sleep…
because these saturated pleasantries cascading
down my inner thighs, keep blushing for just a fraction
of your swell. '
An exquisite piece of writing that captures the moment wonderfully.
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23rd May 2016 2:08am
Re. I Can't Sleep...
30th May 2016 3:50pm
-----> this right here. Mmmmm mmm mmm. A longing to foreva be your "wet linguistic" Your mind pretty lady, simply your mind. #wetwords
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Re: Re. I Can't Sleep...
2nd Jun 2016 6:52am
I see what you did right thurrr! :)
Must be an awesome read for a revisit! Ha! ;) Thank you!
Must be an awesome read for a revisit! Ha! ;) Thank you!
Re. I Can't Sleep...
11th Jul 2016 7:19am
Re: Re. I Can't Sleep...
12th Jul 2016 5:47pm
I was about to send out a search party for ya! :) Good seeing you hun, thanks for the lyrical love...and for listing her....
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