deepundergroundpoetry.com
The first shots were fired at sunrise
It’s funny how we're afraid to start,
using life as an excuse and run for tomorrow,
Life is nearer; face down in the mud,
and I won’t touch it, alive or not,
I run to the one with their head split open
with a vision of blood pumping – like a fresh ornament,
My whole life has been about confronting my fears,
and if not for death I wouldn’ have known where to stop.
Published 28th Mar 2016
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
likes 5
reading list entries 1
comments 6
reads 675
Commenting Preference:
The author encourages honest critique.
28th Mar 2016 3:08am
Awesome as usual, Reita.
Critique: You need an apostrophy in your we're first stanza, first line...
Critique: You need an apostrophy in your we're first stanza, first line...
28th Mar 2016 4:54am
28th Mar 2016 3:32pm
It’s funny how we're afraid to start,
using life as an excuse and run for tomorrow ... BRAVO!!!!
This is simply marvelous.
using life as an excuse and run for tomorrow ... BRAVO!!!!
This is simply marvelous.
28th Mar 2016 11:39pm
29th Mar 2016 4:57am
Do you know how many times I’ve used the word comprehensive without fully understanding the meaning from lack of a definitive measurement?
Comprehensive first aide teaches me that when I come upon an accident I need to run for the one with the blood pumping because that’s the one that is proven to be living, and seconds count as heart beats.
The one with the face in the mud, even though he’s suffocating, and even though he may be closer, can suffocate for a few minutes – because the fact is he may be dead. I have to get over there to the one bleeding from his head and get the tourniquet around his neck. :) Then I can go and check on the one that’s suffocating. :)
Comprehensive first aide teaches me that when I come upon an accident I need to run for the one with the blood pumping because that’s the one that is proven to be living, and seconds count as heart beats.
The one with the face in the mud, even though he’s suffocating, and even though he may be closer, can suffocate for a few minutes – because the fact is he may be dead. I have to get over there to the one bleeding from his head and get the tourniquet around his neck. :) Then I can go and check on the one that’s suffocating. :)
30th Mar 2016 3:40am
