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A GOOD DAY
I will fall on the sword for you
He offers
I do not need you to tonight
She replies
Pulling him by the hand
Away from the blade
He offers
I do not need you to tonight
She replies
Pulling him by the hand
Away from the blade
Published 16th Feb 2016
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1st Aug 2018 10:33pm
I love the images here and I relate to her. However in the second verse you write
"I do not need you to tonight". I don't get that sentence. Is it me or is it some kind of typo?
"I do not need you to tonight". I don't get that sentence. Is it me or is it some kind of typo?
1st Aug 2018 10:52pm
I probably should have put a comma in there:
"I do not need you to, tonight"
The idea being she doesn't need him to do that, not yet at least. A bit clumsily worded, I suppose.
"I do not need you to, tonight"
The idea being she doesn't need him to do that, not yet at least. A bit clumsily worded, I suppose.
1st Aug 2018 10:56pm
