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Elope
Did I turn off the oven and
dim all the lights, pull down the blinds,
close and lock the door, what for?
Cause it doesn't matter really,
tempered with the fact that
I'm racing down the street
to the bus stop, 'cause I forgot
all about my car; I do have one.
The cat! No wait, I don't have that.
I feel so alive! Where’s my tote?
Oh, on my shoulder, but don’t stop,
keep runnin’, and what’s my name?
But it doesn't matter really.
I prolly forgot my rouge & brush
in love’s flush, and what day it is.
Neither coat, nor change o' clothes,
I can't think about those!
That's not why I'm in a hurry,
reminding myself as tears
crawl into my ears from the wind.
But it doesn't matter really.
I just need to put down steps and
mark the miles behind me till I’m
where he waits, with coffee for him & me.
Published 12th Feb 2016
| Edited 22nd Sep 2020
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I have stared at this box in my phone for five minutes... and all I have is tears... of laughter and a longing ache...
that's holding back my words...
geoff
that's holding back my words...
geoff
*sits with you, looking at the box in your phone, nudging you playfully*
I'll get you a tissue... need a tissue?
I'll get you a tissue... need a tissue?
12th Feb 2016 4:38pm
(I hate to intrude on this precious moment; however, I just want to say [very quietly] that this is beautifully filled with what matters [and it's nothing materialistic]. Thank you for sharing...bows out gracefully.)
*coossss* ahh, dearest Ahavati...
it's lovely when material takes a backseat to anything more worthy.
Thank you, sweetheart. <3
it's lovely when material takes a backseat to anything more worthy.
Thank you, sweetheart. <3
Anonymous
13th Feb 2016 2:13am
how clever is this?! it is perfect love poem. well done!
13th Feb 2016 3:05am
Thank you so much, dearest Minerva. How lovely to receive what you came to share with me. <3
13th Feb 2016 7:00pm
Such a clever and interesting write you made here Jade.
Amazingly well done, loved it very much :)
Amazingly well done, loved it very much :)
13th Feb 2016 9:19pm
Aww thank you, dearest Rocky... I'm so glad how you feel about it--
with Jadey love😘
with Jadey love😘
Anonymous
1st Mar 2016 2:18am
I felt your words spear through
my heart and back.
Cant really breathe right now,
this is painful.
But beautiful in its flow.
my heart and back.
Cant really breathe right now,
this is painful.
But beautiful in its flow.
1st Mar 2016 3:05am
Thank you so much, Malady. Most honored by your feelings of intense embrace. --Jade
5th Feb 2017 6:50pm
Your repetitions and rhymes displays a special rhythm, energy, and excitement. In fact, this piece feels like it's been inspired by a form of poetry. The syntax of the fourth stanza felt unusual. The poem title is simple and very very clever: the scene, within your poem, makes complete sense when I read the definition of "elope."
