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Sunrise⛅️
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Before the last time of my birth
And far beyond it was my first
I make a voyage most profound
Before its rudder runs aground.
Adieu skyscraper spires vast
By tall ship’s canvas-billow’d mast
Across an ocean, right to find,
A life of calling, left behind.
Aligning with a northern speck
To guide me on my global trek
And kiss a rising shoreline’s day
Of star-tipped palm fronds’ thoughtful sway
Atop the arms of listing greet
My native, soulful heart, entreat.
Gentle breakers whisper, saying
Here is where I shall be staying.
And from a dream I memorize,
Trade winds singing songs of sunrise.
The audio: http://www.thelastlightproductions.com/audio/Sunrise.mp3
©2016 Jade-Pandora. All Rights Reserved.
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Before the last time of my birth
And far beyond it was my first
I make a voyage most profound
Before its rudder runs aground.
Adieu skyscraper spires vast
By tall ship’s canvas-billow’d mast
Across an ocean, right to find,
A life of calling, left behind.
Aligning with a northern speck
To guide me on my global trek
And kiss a rising shoreline’s day
Of star-tipped palm fronds’ thoughtful sway
Atop the arms of listing greet
My native, soulful heart, entreat.
Gentle breakers whisper, saying
Here is where I shall be staying.
And from a dream I memorize,
Trade winds singing songs of sunrise.
The audio: http://www.thelastlightproductions.com/audio/Sunrise.mp3
©2016 Jade-Pandora. All Rights Reserved.
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Published 23rd Jan 2016
| Edited 27th Jun 2019
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23rd Jan 2016 6:53am
Hard to miss the zen influences. I am very much taken by your ability pair up two sets of lines with such ease!
*smiles wistfully*
Your support of a style I enjoy so much, to ride its wave when the curve takes me all the way through is what's so lovely, and so smooth, and allows the reader to feel it just as I do. I thank you with a nod towards your skill of reading, good sir.
btw, I set this to couplets with 8 syllables per line - a challenge I love to give myself from time-to-time.
Your support of a style I enjoy so much, to ride its wave when the curve takes me all the way through is what's so lovely, and so smooth, and allows the reader to feel it just as I do. I thank you with a nod towards your skill of reading, good sir.
btw, I set this to couplets with 8 syllables per line - a challenge I love to give myself from time-to-time.
23rd Jan 2016 7:22am
Such a beautiful and profound way to describe a lovely, strong woman like yourself.
You can tell you have some zen influence in here as well.
I admire this piece very much.
Into the reading list it goes... :)
You can tell you have some zen influence in here as well.
I admire this piece very much.
Into the reading list it goes... :)
23rd Jan 2016 7:50am
Dearest Rocky, I was in another window trying to record this very poem! I thought I'd take a break and here you are, with your loveliness, and wonderful comment - thank you so much, and thank you for adding it to your RL - how honored I am. <3
23rd Jan 2016 8:00am
Your welcome Jade and it's great that you're gonna record this.
And how could I not put something like this in my reading list?
It was worth it :)
And how could I not put something like this in my reading list?
It was worth it :)
23rd Jan 2016 9:18am
Jade,
This is beautifully written and I enjoyed it immensely. Could feel myself relaxing with each line
read.
Keith
This is beautifully written and I enjoyed it immensely. Could feel myself relaxing with each line
read.
Keith
23rd Jan 2016 9:34am
Thank you so much, Keith, for sharing how my poem soothed you in its gentle embrace -- I'm very honored.
23rd Jan 2016 9:34am
Jade, I love the two verse stanza. it works so well with the rhyming cadence. Added to the reading list cuz it is worth many more happy readings.
23rd Jan 2016 10:18am
I bow to your agenda of my humble piece, dear Ed, honored to know it will continue to bring you smiles - and thank you for the support of adding it to your RL.
23rd Jan 2016 1:30pm
And kiss a rising shoreline’s day
Of star-tipped palm fronds’ thoughtful sway
Atop the arms of listing greet
My native, soulful heart, entreat.
Gentle breakers whisper, saying
Here is where I shall be staying.
I love these images... very calming... very resolving...
Of star-tipped palm fronds’ thoughtful sway
Atop the arms of listing greet
My native, soulful heart, entreat.
Gentle breakers whisper, saying
Here is where I shall be staying.
I love these images... very calming... very resolving...
26th Jan 2016 11:29pm
Thank you so much, Geoff. I'm always grateful when some of my poetry can give a reader reason to let go and float.
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26th Jan 2016 11:51pm
Dearest Taryn, thank you for your words describing the ways this poem makes you feel the grace of such visual emotions. Your support is a grace that I receive in return.
Also with love back to you,
Jadey xoxo
Also with love back to you,
Jadey xoxo
23rd Jan 2016 10:33pm
jade, this was awesome. i loved the rhyme with thestanza construction. very smooth to read. peaceful. so nice
26th Jan 2016 11:56pm
Dearest Ed, I am always thankful when a reader says that something I've written gives them emotions that they embrace because it's valid, and clearly evident, within their minds, and how they feel throughout. It's always been very special to me when it comes to writing, and what readers take out of it that even I may not have anticipated till they let me know.
