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Tales of the tweaked
I can feel you fading
I feel myself leaving
Forgotten, shaken & jaded
You use to deceive me
Fuck me up when your faded
And NEVER believe me
They raped me, you shaded
All your friends seeing
Nobody aided
You were busy tweaking
Scared to get raided
Watching the tv
Front door cascaded
With tables & love seats
They took turns; 3 of them traded
With 1 watching you tweak
My innocence degraded
Negatively dissuaded
Speaking Byzantine Greek
Speaking nothing but hatred
Now I'm feeling weak
& they're feeling persuaded
"I need to sleep"
Forcing me naked
"Get away creep!"
My veins they invaded
Lowest point I could reach
I've been forsaken
Death is what I seek
My life's been taken
So you could fuckin tweak
My bodies shaking
Now I feel defeat
I feel myself leaving
Forgotten, shaken & jaded
You use to deceive me
Fuck me up when your faded
And NEVER believe me
They raped me, you shaded
All your friends seeing
Nobody aided
You were busy tweaking
Scared to get raided
Watching the tv
Front door cascaded
With tables & love seats
They took turns; 3 of them traded
With 1 watching you tweak
My innocence degraded
Negatively dissuaded
Speaking Byzantine Greek
Speaking nothing but hatred
Now I'm feeling weak
& they're feeling persuaded
"I need to sleep"
Forcing me naked
"Get away creep!"
My veins they invaded
Lowest point I could reach
I've been forsaken
Death is what I seek
My life's been taken
So you could fuckin tweak
My bodies shaking
Now I feel defeat
Published 15th Jan 2016
| Edited 16th Jan 2016
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15th Jan 2016 10:42pm
A profoundly evocative ink...am not sure it's fact or fiction, in any case this is soul shaking stuff...
Unfortunately, It is fact.
Fortunately, I am growing past it
Anywho, thank you for stopping by and commenting :)
Fortunately, I am growing past it
Anywho, thank you for stopping by and commenting :)
15th Jan 2016 11:14pm
am shattered to hear that!..speechless! at the same time I admire your guts and courage! A true survivor in my opinion!! Your works here are absolutely inspirational to other victims of abuse!! You don't need to don a super-hero costume to be called as such...
15th Jan 2016 11:16pm
Thank you for your kind words!
I do hope I can help someone so they don't have to go through this nonsense.
I do hope I can help someone so they don't have to go through this nonsense.
16th Jan 2016 9:03am
Sometimes the reality is just as you described. Great poem. Your courage and heart seem genuine and may your soul be blessed. Trials of an addict sentenced to memory's that are yours to never forget.
16th Jan 2016 10:55pm
Thank you for reading!
Memories can be good or bad as long as we grow from them.
Memories can be good or bad as long as we grow from them.
16th Jan 2016 11:52am
Gave me chills reading this.The abuse that went on is devastating.Good write keep it up.
16th Jan 2016 1:01pm
I appreciated the poem as a whole, especially the attention to detail and continuous rhyming pattern.
16th Jan 2016 1:32pm
Speechless... Well done.
You have so much courage to convert this nightmare in a beautiful piece of poetry.
I think this will help you to get rid of your nightmares a bit. I'm sure you have written much more stuff about it and you should feel proud of yourself.
The rhyming is lovely in the poem and even if it is a personal experience and a lyric poem, it can work like a metaphor as well in other situations,
like for all the times our emotions are raped or political stuff about the weak people and the ones who have the power, for a certain period of time.
Keep it up! :)))
You have so much courage to convert this nightmare in a beautiful piece of poetry.
I think this will help you to get rid of your nightmares a bit. I'm sure you have written much more stuff about it and you should feel proud of yourself.
The rhyming is lovely in the poem and even if it is a personal experience and a lyric poem, it can work like a metaphor as well in other situations,
like for all the times our emotions are raped or political stuff about the weak people and the ones who have the power, for a certain period of time.
Keep it up! :)))
16th Jan 2016 10:57pm
Thank you so much!!
I do write a lot on the same subject. It really does release a lot of stuff that needs to be released! Lol
Thank you for such great insight to this write also!!
Kayla :))
I do write a lot on the same subject. It really does release a lot of stuff that needs to be released! Lol
Thank you for such great insight to this write also!!
Kayla :))
16th Jan 2016 5:47pm
I too am speechless and have had similar experiences - It is so brave of you to share this work and I have no doubt it will help others :-)
such a sensitive piece of poetry gave me a lump in my throat - I feel for you - I feel for us :-)
such a sensitive piece of poetry gave me a lump in my throat - I feel for you - I feel for us :-)
16th Jan 2016 10:59pm
David, I feel for us too!!
thank you for reading and understanding as always.
I am so sorry that you've experienced something similar... :/
But thank you again for reading, David!
Always a pleasure
Kayla :)
thank you for reading and understanding as always.
I am so sorry that you've experienced something similar... :/
But thank you again for reading, David!
Always a pleasure
Kayla :)
18th Jan 2016 2:59pm
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