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Dust
My mind is stuck in a timezone -
One in which i learnt to never trust,
To never send my heart away, to tell myself its just a case of lust,
But my heart and dizzying mind were captured and inhabited by your warmth,
But the breathe you breathe and the words you speak seem to whither and fade to dust,
I'm in despair and dont know where i am in this world and whether what i have given was too big of a gift - one that is going to be exchanged for a bigger prize - one that doesn't contain a trace of me
One in which i learnt to never trust,
To never send my heart away, to tell myself its just a case of lust,
But my heart and dizzying mind were captured and inhabited by your warmth,
But the breathe you breathe and the words you speak seem to whither and fade to dust,
I'm in despair and dont know where i am in this world and whether what i have given was too big of a gift - one that is going to be exchanged for a bigger prize - one that doesn't contain a trace of me
Published 19th Dec 2015
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21st Dec 2015 6:00am
dragging cold emotional fingers down my spine...last line stopped my heart...keep killing me Enigma...I LOVE IT!
21st Dec 2015 8:15am
21st Dec 2015 8:18pm
This is stunning piece of poetry. The experimental nature of rhyme and meter is fascinating and clever--it ended in such a powerful abrupt way. That is what makes the poem transcendent to me.
Thank you for sharing your work.
Thank you for sharing your work.
22nd Dec 2015 00:55am
Awww, wow, thank you so much, i really appreciate you reading my poem and for taking the time to comment , hope you have a lovely day c:
5th Jan 2016 2:23pm
I am struck by the rhyme scheme- not seen in most poems. This presents a degree of introspection that is typically done way too late. Of course even when done the challenge is the application.
5th Jan 2016 7:37pm
Thank you so much for commenting c: it's appreciated - hope you have a lovely day x)
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5th Jan 2016 8:02pm
Aww thank you so much :') you always leave such lovely comments - I'm glad you liked it, thank you again ! :D Happy new year !!! X)
30th Oct 2016 1:59pm
"To never send my heart away, to tell myself its just a case of lust," love this
very tender heartfelt piece..
very tender heartfelt piece..
3rd Feb 2017 1:58am
"one that doesn't contain a trace of me"
my favorite line, makes my heart hurt. Great poem, peace!
my favorite line, makes my heart hurt. Great poem, peace!
26th Apr 2017 00:53am
7th Dec 2017 11:57am
Emotions Very well articulated "I'm in despair and dont know where i am in this world and whether what i have given was too big of a gift " these lines say so much when it comes to feeling.Very honest write,and for that I appreciate it even more.Great poem.-Jae
