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Doorway
Lamplight shines on the
Tiny iridescent sparkling
Ice cold droplets storm
Torn by the gusting wind
Sparkling highlights in
Your eyelashes, cheeks
Your hair. Eyes sparkle
Cold colours your cheeks
Harden your tiny nipples
Seeking shelter from the
Impatient wind in a deep
Dark doorway, you press
Against me laughing
Looking for my heat
Mouth open, I claim
Your mouth with my
Penetrating tongue
Softly you moan, suck
Consume, invite my
Hungry touching hands
Your breast brief way
Stations on the way to
Your skirt, and then
Wetness, warm from
Inside you. Lips
Parting under my
Probing fingers
You guide me
And banish the cold.
Tiny iridescent sparkling
Ice cold droplets storm
Torn by the gusting wind
Sparkling highlights in
Your eyelashes, cheeks
Your hair. Eyes sparkle
Cold colours your cheeks
Harden your tiny nipples
Seeking shelter from the
Impatient wind in a deep
Dark doorway, you press
Against me laughing
Looking for my heat
Mouth open, I claim
Your mouth with my
Penetrating tongue
Softly you moan, suck
Consume, invite my
Hungry touching hands
Your breast brief way
Stations on the way to
Your skirt, and then
Wetness, warm from
Inside you. Lips
Parting under my
Probing fingers
You guide me
And banish the cold.
Published 15th Dec 2015
| Edited 17th Dec 2015
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16th Dec 2015 6:27pm
That was pretty awesome. What amazing imagery! There are so many lines which took me...'cold colors your cheeks', 'impatient wind', 'banish the cold'. What?! Yeah, pretty awesome. I'm really impressed. Nice write. Welcome.
Critique: I think there is a typo in there concerning the word 'you' vice 'your'.
Critique: I think there is a typo in there concerning the word 'you' vice 'your'.
17th Dec 2015 12:34pm
Thank you for your comments but especially for spotting the missing "r". It has been fixed.
23rd Dec 2015 12:03pm
Very vivid imagery. And the words roll off the tongue in a particularly pleasant fashion when read aloud. Nice work.
23rd Dec 2015 7:07pm
