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Re-entry
high in the blackness of clearest night
framed by an open window, vapor trails
razor-cut through a morning sky
re-entry— pieces of space rain down,
streaks of silver atmospheric shimmer
ghosts of astronauts returning, silent in
the cold void where summer cannot reach
I watch past your ear while you move
over me, quiet breath, soft nostril gusts
a single grunt suggests your voice, and
I look away from the sight brought to earth,
pulled back by the deep welling warmth
as your ship plummets into the gulf—
recovering while, unnoticed from the open
window, the residue continues to fall
© 2015 Jade Pandora
framed by an open window, vapor trails
razor-cut through a morning sky
re-entry— pieces of space rain down,
streaks of silver atmospheric shimmer
ghosts of astronauts returning, silent in
the cold void where summer cannot reach
I watch past your ear while you move
over me, quiet breath, soft nostril gusts
a single grunt suggests your voice, and
I look away from the sight brought to earth,
pulled back by the deep welling warmth
as your ship plummets into the gulf—
recovering while, unnoticed from the open
window, the residue continues to fall
© 2015 Jade Pandora
Published 7th Dec 2015
| Edited 20th Jan 2020
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7th Dec 2015 4:41pm
7th Dec 2015 4:46pm
7th Dec 2015 6:24pm
I remembered what poem this reminded me of. We look out into the universe and observe the spiritual beauty it reveals, while it looks down on us and desires to remember the beauty we feel as human.
Read Phantom Anniversary by Kim Addonizio.
Read Phantom Anniversary by Kim Addonizio.
After all these years when I didn’t know of your reply when you told me about “Phantom Anniversary” by Kim Addonizio, I was looking for a particular piece of mine about 15 minutes ago when I came upon my “Re-entry”, and your comment. And I googled to find it just like that. It’s wonderful - I knew right away why mine reminded you of hers. I wish I’d known of it when the CC in her honor was ongoing, my entry would have meant so much more.
Thank you for initially referring me to it.
“Phantom Anniversary”
Imagine the marriage lasting,
the lilies blooming in the black vase
for years, the water still fresh.
The man and woman are looking at each other
as they fuck, blooming and looking,
and the angels are looking, too,
opening their beautiful abstract mouths
as though they are about to say something
neither difficult nor true.
The man and woman are oblivious.
They grow fainter and fainter without caring.
And the angels fold their wings flat
and plummet toward them like stones.
Thank you for initially referring me to it.
“Phantom Anniversary”
Imagine the marriage lasting,
the lilies blooming in the black vase
for years, the water still fresh.
The man and woman are looking at each other
as they fuck, blooming and looking,
and the angels are looking, too,
opening their beautiful abstract mouths
as though they are about to say something
neither difficult nor true.
The man and woman are oblivious.
They grow fainter and fainter without caring.
And the angels fold their wings flat
and plummet toward them like stones.
8th Dec 2015 1:46am
I enjoyed several things:
- The flowed well, and circled back to the window in the end, which added to the comfy feel of this poem.
- The twin levels of outer space, and the earth connected by the ghosts of astronauts returning
- this slow, sensual piece deserves to be savored.
Thank you this
- The flowed well, and circled back to the window in the end, which added to the comfy feel of this poem.
- The twin levels of outer space, and the earth connected by the ghosts of astronauts returning
- this slow, sensual piece deserves to be savored.
Thank you this
I'm aghast at how your comment fell through the atmosphere, almost through the crack, till I happened upon it just now!
Dear Ed, I'm honored by how you embraced my poem - a poem that goes deeper than what it may appear to be on the surface, as you knew. I hope you get my answer, at long last.
And you've got the pace of the piece just right.
Jadey
Dear Ed, I'm honored by how you embraced my poem - a poem that goes deeper than what it may appear to be on the surface, as you knew. I hope you get my answer, at long last.
And you've got the pace of the piece just right.
Jadey
24th Mar 2016 10:39am
This is a metaphor I would never have thought of Jade, but you managed to bring a tragedy into a scene of passion that makes perfect sense. The imagery of the shuttle breaking up is powerful in its own right, but you give it a whole new perspective in sensual after-play...
JJ
JJ
24th Mar 2016 11:10am
My esteem to you, Joe, for taking in the layers of my piece so perfectly. The way you describe how it makes you feel is a cherished footnote for me.
Jadey
Jadey
