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I'm teetering on the edge of faded glory
Because of a genocide history
Exploding in my mind
One ignition at a time
It must be a crime, NO, more like a sin
This warfare goes way back
So where do i begin
See, I take the pen and stain the paper
Skipping all the lines
But tattooing between the spaces
Using the safety mode of my unconscious mind
Trying to strip clean of the many faces I hide
This paper is like my prison and my saviour all in one
Its like emotions are my unborn baby
Yet poetry is my son
These ribs defend my heart
Like an animal in a cage
But this organ, with holes still beats
Bleeding ink onto this stage
Its not where i perform but this stage is my life
The curtains are my eyelids
Hiding my darkness from the light
If these walls could talk they'd have zero to say
My mouth remains mute
No canvas, no display
Yet over and over memories tivo rewind
Reliving my horrors time after time
I was lost and i looked but i still didn't find
The cure to the aftershock that rendered me blind
Because of a genocide history
Exploding in my mind
One ignition at a time
It must be a crime, NO, more like a sin
This warfare goes way back
So where do i begin
See, I take the pen and stain the paper
Skipping all the lines
But tattooing between the spaces
Using the safety mode of my unconscious mind
Trying to strip clean of the many faces I hide
This paper is like my prison and my saviour all in one
Its like emotions are my unborn baby
Yet poetry is my son
These ribs defend my heart
Like an animal in a cage
But this organ, with holes still beats
Bleeding ink onto this stage
Its not where i perform but this stage is my life
The curtains are my eyelids
Hiding my darkness from the light
If these walls could talk they'd have zero to say
My mouth remains mute
No canvas, no display
Yet over and over memories tivo rewind
Reliving my horrors time after time
I was lost and i looked but i still didn't find
The cure to the aftershock that rendered me blind
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Re. LOST
6th Dec 2015 11:08am
WOW that was a very vivid, powerful, sad way to define being lost... Outstanding ink.
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Re: Re. LOST
6th Dec 2015 9:50pm
Re. LOST
Anonymous
6th Dec 2015 6:35pm
I must agree with Poetikmind. It is a
very bad situation when you look and
search for sanity but cannot find it. I
have big time been there and I don't
envy yours in yours. But you are on the
right track using poetry to vent, I know I
did and I believe my vents helped me
climb my way out of my turmoil.
very bad situation when you look and
search for sanity but cannot find it. I
have big time been there and I don't
envy yours in yours. But you are on the
right track using poetry to vent, I know I
did and I believe my vents helped me
climb my way out of my turmoil.
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Re: Re. LOST
6th Dec 2015 9:51pm
Thank you for the encouraging words..I'm feeling my way through these feelings but I have a long way to go
Re. LOST
7th Dec 2015 3:38pm
Nicely written! I don't presume to know what you're going through but I think I've been (still am?) in a similar place.
"This paper is like my prison and my saviour all in one
Its like emotions are my unborn baby
Yet poetry is my son" << I love this image; venting emotions onto paper is just as painful and sweet as childbirth.
"If these walls could talk they'd have zero to say
My mouth remains mute
No canvas, no display
Yet over and over memories tivo rewind
Reliving my horrors time after time" <<< Love this description of the contrast between our outer and inner worlds....
Powerful. Keep writing!
"This paper is like my prison and my saviour all in one
Its like emotions are my unborn baby
Yet poetry is my son" << I love this image; venting emotions onto paper is just as painful and sweet as childbirth.
"If these walls could talk they'd have zero to say
My mouth remains mute
No canvas, no display
Yet over and over memories tivo rewind
Reliving my horrors time after time" <<< Love this description of the contrast between our outer and inner worlds....
Powerful. Keep writing!
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Re: Re. LOST
7th Dec 2015 3:57pm
Thank you so much for taking time to read and relate to my feelings...also thank you the continued encouragement and support...poetry really keeps me above sea level...I love reading and sharing with you all !!
Re. LOST
7th Dec 2015 7:23pm
beautifully written, reads like a descent into madness - I am constantly teetering and do find poetry to be the one thing that prevents the slide of no return. I don't believe that there is a true definition of sanity, we each find our own - anyway sometimes crazy can be good and creative :-)
excellent ink :-)
excellent ink :-)
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Re: Re. LOST
7th Dec 2015 11:00pm
Awesome.thanks for opening a little piece of yourself up to me...thank you for reading and commenting
Re. LOST
Anonymous
7th Dec 2015 8:04pm
I enjoyed this piece, nice flow and great visuals with some unique metaphor.
:) thanks for the read
:) thanks for the read
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Re: Re. LOST
7th Dec 2015 11:01pm
Thanks so much for dropping by reading and commenting...I greatly appreciate your feedback...glad you enjoyed it
Re. LOST
7th Dec 2015 11:36pm
incredible writing!!! speaking your pain while not is very difficult to display...and I think you did an awesome job of it....and i am sorry for your pain
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Re: Re. LOST
9th Dec 2015 2:36pm
Thank you so much for your empathy and time taken to read and comment and understand where I'm coming from with my words😊
Re. LOST
8th Dec 2015 9:00pm
Beautiful poem, feels very honest.
Especially love:
"But this organ, with holes still beats
Bleeding ink onto this stage"
And:
"I was lost and i looked but i still didn't find
The cure to the aftershock that rendered me blind"
Fantastic imagery x
Especially love:
"But this organ, with holes still beats
Bleeding ink onto this stage"
And:
"I was lost and i looked but i still didn't find
The cure to the aftershock that rendered me blind"
Fantastic imagery x
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Re: Re. LOST
9th Dec 2015 2:37pm
Thank you Raa it came from a very honest place indeed. Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comments. Mad love to you !!
Re. LOST
28th Jan 2016 5:44am
The floetry of this piece is oso deep!
What a good read to say the least!
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