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In Submission
hurting because I feel you
your presence so Domineering
commands my attention
I'm speaking from a place
of honest submission
naked I stand before you
kneeling at your feet
I bow before you
you've bound my soul
for my insolent disobedience
I'm a naughty submissive
always up to mischief
feeling the heat
of my wild ways
the lash of your belt
leaving welts on my bare flesh
tasting you, feeling you
showing you my soft side
knowing what you desire from me
giving you the opposite
what a cunt I can be
detached and aloof you stand
towering above me
with a look of disproval
I've earned your silence
with my passive aggression
testing your strength of will
it's the whore in me
that you desire and detest
bending over taking you full force
reveling in your attention
I have no more games to play
not wanting to mess with you
bowing to your greatness
piss down my throat
all the nasty words you wish to say
I will drink them down
then spit fire setting my lips ablaze
when I speak out of turn
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Re. In Submission
Brenda, besides that being absolutely freakin hot. Loved the picture. I think my curiosity has about peaked with this write. You're
just a naughty girl. :) ms Crimsin .
Seriously hot ink.
Love
Always
Keith
just a naughty girl. :) ms Crimsin .
Seriously hot ink.
Love
Always
Keith
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13th Nov 2015 6:47pm
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Re: Re. In Submission
13th Nov 2015 6:49pm
beautiful one thank you graciously for such a wonderful response to this write making me smile wide :)
I love you so much..
xoxoxo Brenda
I love you so much..
xoxoxo Brenda
Re. In Submission
12th Nov 2015 7:48am
she's a submissive w/a rebellious streak
for more severe punishment.
you're a spitfire, Crim...
for more severe punishment.
you're a spitfire, Crim...
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Re: Re. In Submission
13th Nov 2015 6:50pm
Re. In Submission
12th Nov 2015 10:05am
"for my insolent disobedience
I'm a naughty submissive
always up to mischief"
Every line is strong but very much loved those 😁
Greatfull for this lovely share of yours
I'm a naughty submissive
always up to mischief"
Every line is strong but very much loved those 😁
Greatfull for this lovely share of yours
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Re: Re. In Submission
13th Nov 2015 6:51pm
Re. In Submission
12th Nov 2015 10:34am
oh sweet hells of Yes.. Naughty Brenda!!
you got me at sight of tattooed fingers in pic- always all 'bout those hands!
throughout the entirety of this f-ing hot drippage.. you play it perfectly..
"for my insolent disobedience
I'm a naughty submissive
always up to mischief"
&
"knowing what you desire from me
giving you the opposite
what a cunt I can be"
~bad sub is sexy in its own right!.. *wet witch in low bow to you ;)
"I have no more games to play
not wanting to mess with you"
~the submit after sinfully crossing boundaries-- just plain bumps the temp to scalding..
I simply *adore this feisty side of your pen, ladyluvs! my cali mountain is chilly no more.. tyty ;)
much wicked spanx n kisses.. I love you!
~d
you got me at sight of tattooed fingers in pic- always all 'bout those hands!
throughout the entirety of this f-ing hot drippage.. you play it perfectly..
"for my insolent disobedience
I'm a naughty submissive
always up to mischief"
&
"knowing what you desire from me
giving you the opposite
what a cunt I can be"
~bad sub is sexy in its own right!.. *wet witch in low bow to you ;)
"I have no more games to play
not wanting to mess with you"
~the submit after sinfully crossing boundaries-- just plain bumps the temp to scalding..
I simply *adore this feisty side of your pen, ladyluvs! my cali mountain is chilly no more.. tyty ;)
much wicked spanx n kisses.. I love you!
~d
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Re: Re. In Submission
13th Nov 2015 6:57pm
lovely d~ as always blown away by your comments thank you for showing me and this write love :)
love you lady love Brenda
love you lady love Brenda
Re. In Submission
Anonymous
12th Nov 2015 6:48pm
Brenda, this is smoking hot.. awe struck on this one.. just brilliantly, and beautifully penned.. list worthy with out a doubt.. with love..
Dave
Dave
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Re: Re. In Submission
13th Nov 2015 6:59pm
Re. In Submission
12th Nov 2015 11:12pm
I am discovering a theme in your work. Maybe I should have picked it up sooner. But for some reason, it became evident with this one.
"it's the whore in me
that you desire and detest
bending over taking you full force "
my favorite line of this write. I relate to it. Thank you Crim.
"it's the whore in me
that you desire and detest
bending over taking you full force "
my favorite line of this write. I relate to it. Thank you Crim.
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Re: Re. In Submission
13th Nov 2015 7:00pm
thank you DPW for picking up on that yes there is an underlying inspiration also for such a great comment :)
love Crim
love Crim
Re. In Submission
13th Nov 2015 1:01pm
hard , hot and heavy, three words spring to mind. They should really only apply yo the master, but here it seems yo apply to the slave - isn't diversity awesome and strange at the same time :-)
excellent ink :-)
excellent ink :-)
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Re: Re. In Submission
13th Nov 2015 7:02pm
Re. In Submission
14th Nov 2015 8:13pm
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15th Nov 2015 5:52pm
Re. In Submission
15th Nov 2015 6:39pm
"I will drink them down
then spit fire setting my lips ablaze
when I speak out of turn" . .. - spitfire, indeed! Sending sordid desires deeply into our lustful minds.. salacious inking, Sweet Sin! :)~
then spit fire setting my lips ablaze
when I speak out of turn" . .. - spitfire, indeed! Sending sordid desires deeply into our lustful minds.. salacious inking, Sweet Sin! :)~
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Re: Re. In Submission
16th Nov 2015 3:25pm