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it's just nice to sit down...
we met online -
which is a little like
meeting on the bus,
except of course
that we don't get off,
but that's fine...
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Re. it's just nice to sit down...
12th Nov 2015 4:25am
I liked how you compared meeting online to meeting on the bus and cleverly ended by alluding to the internet of not going offline
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Re: Re. it's just nice to sit down...
12th Nov 2015 11:39pm
oh, thanks very much...
of course, 'getting off'
with someone does
also contain a sexual
allusion, so I guess I
was being rather cheap...
of course, 'getting off'
with someone does
also contain a sexual
allusion, so I guess I
was being rather cheap...
Re. it's just nice to sit down...
12th Nov 2015 10:08pm
Yes, that's fine indeed. It can be conflicting to get off with someone you've met online ... I'd prefer the getting off the bus and going off in different directions :-).
I like this poem so so so much! Like most of yours :-).
I like this poem so so so much! Like most of yours :-).
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Re: Re. it's just nice to sit down...
12th Nov 2015 11:43pm
thanks, dear Chi -
of course, if you
were on the bus
I'd make sure I
carried a piano
with me..:)
of course, if you
were on the bus
I'd make sure I
carried a piano
with me..:)
Re. it's just nice to sit down...
13th Nov 2015 00:51am
get off ! heh,heh, didja hear, Beavis? he said "get off"...heh heh
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Re: Re. it's just nice to sit down...
13th Nov 2015 2:01am
I didn't, I didn't, it's a misprint!
oh alright, I'll admit it -
I'll let anything in just as long
as it isn't wearing a tie...
oh alright, I'll admit it -
I'll let anything in just as long
as it isn't wearing a tie...
Re. it's just nice to sit down...
13th Nov 2015 12:48pm
Re: Re. it's just nice to sit down...
15th Nov 2015 00:02am
Re. it's just nice to sit down...
14th Nov 2015 11:59pm
Totally inappropriate, but I have to say it. There are many different ways of "getting off" ;)
Having read much of your work, I'm sure the subtext was intended. Not that I mind, it made me laugh.
Having read much of your work, I'm sure the subtext was intended. Not that I mind, it made me laugh.
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Re: Re. it's just nice to sit down...
15th Nov 2015 00:05am
I afraid the subtext did rather
determine the poem...
mind you, the whole making
people laugh thing
was really the intention so,
phew, thanks..:)
determine the poem...
mind you, the whole making
people laugh thing
was really the intention so,
phew, thanks..:)
Re. it's just nice to sit down...
15th Nov 2015 7:00am
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16th Nov 2015 00:08am