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The Last Candle
[She wore I love yous like cheap lipstick]
November's exile
feels like a cosmic rendering
of self-serving immunity.
The obliteration of emotional depth
is imminent in the shallows.
The rain returned as promised.
To unhinge from reality and its tasteless virtue,
I excuse myself from the vulgar feast
then lean from the shadows
to blow out the last candle.
I trace my fingers along
the darkness of forgotten words
between lovers, written a long time ago -
I tumble inside that starless night,
marooning myself within
the semiotic musings and moon-spun trysts
only to reverse the river for my pleasure of unfeigned lust.
[And there is where she carved the omen in her own image]
I know what lonely feels like.
© 2015 blue angel
Artwork by Andrew Atroshenko
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Re. The Last Candle
10th Nov 2015 1:37am
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10th Nov 2015 2:08am
Thank you for the kind words and for reading me, Crim. I'm very appreciative to have your presence here.
Anonymous
- Edited 25th Sep 2020 3:45am
10th Nov 2015 2:32am
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Re: Re. The Last Candle
10th Nov 2015 2:37am
You warm me with your words sweet Taryn! ((Hugs you back))Much appreciate you stopping by with your gentleness!
Re. The Last Candle
10th Nov 2015 3:09am
GAWD! This is beautiful! Would love for you to blow a kiss on my pen's tip, just to inspire her to walk in your shadow....
Love this angel!
Love this angel!
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Re: Re. The Last Candle
10th Nov 2015 3:15am
"Would love for you to blow a kiss on my pen's tip, just to inspire her to walk in your shadow...." - Lovely Rain your pen is casting an evocative shadow of her own! Softly blows a kiss to meet her shadow's tip. Thank you for such an artful response, -blue angel
Re. The Last Candle
10th Nov 2015 3:52am
great noir line to begin your poem, Angel, & the mood carries throughout.
utterly feeling the essence of lonely's cold touch.
excellent artwork too...
utterly feeling the essence of lonely's cold touch.
excellent artwork too...
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Re: Re. The Last Candle
10th Nov 2015 4:08am
Thank you Sir Blues! I'm feeling the muse's melancholy for sure. Always a pleasure, and honor receiving your thoughts.
Re. The Last Candle
10th Nov 2015 5:10pm
Re: Re. The Last Candle
10th Nov 2015 7:58pm
Kavik, I can feel the weight of your reply. Extending warmth, thank you for sharing your thoughts!
Re. The Last Candle
10th Nov 2015 8:05pm
This is intoxicating Blue Angel.
"To unhinge from reality and its tasteless virtue,
I excuse myself from the vulgar feast
then lean from the shadows
to blow out the last candle. "
Reality can be a tasteless, vulgar feast. One look at the evening news and I can't help but agree as you blow out the last candle. That's an elegant move.
"To unhinge from reality and its tasteless virtue,
I excuse myself from the vulgar feast
then lean from the shadows
to blow out the last candle. "
Reality can be a tasteless, vulgar feast. One look at the evening news and I can't help but agree as you blow out the last candle. That's an elegant move.
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Re: Re. The Last Candle
10th Nov 2015 8:20pm
Thank you, crowfly! I agree, listening to the news definitely feels like partaking of a terrible feast. Thanks for stopping by. :)
Re. The Last Candle
Anonymous
- Edited 10th Nov 2015 10:53pm
10th Nov 2015 10:50pm
Angel, this is a beautiful write.. was hooked from beginning to end.. brilliantly penned by a gifted poetess.. these lines really got me..
To unhinge from reality and its tasteless virtue,
I excuse myself from the vulgar feast
then lean from the shadows
to blow out the last candle.
simply blown away.. thanks for sharing.. much respect...
Dave
To unhinge from reality and its tasteless virtue,
I excuse myself from the vulgar feast
then lean from the shadows
to blow out the last candle.
simply blown away.. thanks for sharing.. much respect...
Dave
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Re: Re. The Last Candle
10th Nov 2015 11:00pm
You thrill me with your sweet response! Smiling wildly. Thank you kindly :)
Re. The Last Candle
16th Nov 2015 2:09am
Your words have a Intoxicating effect
Shifting emotions upon unsettled ground
Changing as each line alone has a single effect while the write as a meaning of its own.
I find my self removed from the distraction of the world quite refreshing, almost centering myself as the world temps to change me.
Your words Always dig deep and I find pleasure in that
Shifting emotions upon unsettled ground
Changing as each line alone has a single effect while the write as a meaning of its own.
I find my self removed from the distraction of the world quite refreshing, almost centering myself as the world temps to change me.
Your words Always dig deep and I find pleasure in that
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Re: Re. The Last Candle
16th Nov 2015 2:26pm
Awakenedsoul, comments such as yours, stirs deeper my thrill of composing meaningful poetry! Here's to surmounting the realms of interpretation! Thank you kindly for taking the time to offer your thoughts, it's very much appreciated!
Re. The Last Candle
12th Dec 2015 4:01am
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12th Dec 2015 4:19am
Re. The Last Candle
25th Dec 2015 9:14pm
Oo darling.. I think am going to
be hooked, though my heart is
clasping to be smoothly through
the pain of this. It lingers on the
skin like needle pricks.
Wow.. Blue Angel wow
-Howlings
be hooked, though my heart is
clasping to be smoothly through
the pain of this. It lingers on the
skin like needle pricks.
Wow.. Blue Angel wow
-Howlings
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Re: Re. The Last Candle
28th Dec 2015 1:06am
It's an honor receiving your words, Howling. And it has been a pleasure reading your works, in turn, I should mention. Eloquently ardent.