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Rising Amongst The Ranks
biting, tearing, squirming
demons running unhinged
I'm chaining these bitches
it's time they know who's in charge
there is a Master whose head
has risen from amongst
the host of the Fallen Angels
He rules this dominion with an iron fist
He has climbed the ranks
with an electrical charge
running through His veins
getting all in line among the shadows
He moves silently though with force
fucks my soul tenderly
obscenely beautiful
yet will smack you down if needed
I feel His weight on me
guiding me through the darkness
we have shiny eyes
that tear and gnaw
fuck with me again
hundreds of legion
at my command
owned lady speaking my language
flash fire feel my burn
sweet little whore
disobedient in nature
is now collared and leashed
before my throne
you will stay my Queen
safe in my rank
tasting your pussy now
riding the ether waves
touching you telekinetically
entering your soul
with brutality if you misbehave
get in line, let me love you
loving your fierce nature
let's rule the darkness
we are one, we are powerful
dance the dance macabre
keep the world at your feet
don't fade away
make your mark, take your place
at my side you will stay
until all stars are torn from heaven
darkness being first will rule
so it is said let, let it be done
Published 9th Nov 2015
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Anonymous
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9th Nov 2015 5:57pm
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10th Nov 2015 00:01am
thank you beautiful one for showing me and this write so much love..
I love you :)
xoxoxo Brenda
I love you :)
xoxoxo Brenda
9th Nov 2015 6:02pm
Your tale weaves its spellwork with webs crafted by a master's hand. Excellent ink, dearest Crim.
10th Nov 2015 00:03am
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10th Nov 2015 00:04am
Anonymous
- Edited 9th Nov 2015 6:45pm
9th Nov 2015 6:36pm
Brenda, this is simply beautiful.. in awe of your talent, you're a true poetess.. hooked from the first line, till the end.. brilliantly penned.. into the list it goes.. with love..
Dave
Dave
10th Nov 2015 00:06am
9th Nov 2015 11:08pm
10th Nov 2015 00:07am
Anonymous
9th Nov 2015 11:14pm
MIss Crim. . .I believe you've risen far beyond this wicked ink;). . .xo, Devlin.
10th Nov 2015 00:08am
10th Nov 2015 1:51am
"riding the ether waves
touching you telekinetically
entering your soul
with brutality if you misbehave" ... masterful thoughts unleashed. Darkness elevated. Enchanted by your powerful ink. - blue angel
touching you telekinetically
entering your soul
with brutality if you misbehave" ... masterful thoughts unleashed. Darkness elevated. Enchanted by your powerful ink. - blue angel
10th Nov 2015 8:22pm
10th Nov 2015 4:34am
10th Nov 2015 8:23pm
10th Nov 2015 5:58am
My most pleased unholiee sighs that I log on and find this, a Crim de la crème specialty..
woven in dark Majesties of your ink.. o purrr
"I'm chaining these bitches
it's time they know who's in charge"
~you had me *here ladyluvs!
"He moves silently though with force
fucks my soul tenderly
obscenely beautiful
yet will smack you down if needed"
~um.. yes plsss... ?! I must say favs to your sexy plus smack down here-
tho you make it [sweetly] hard to choose.. ;)
lovely captures of ordered ranking chaos..
*this beeach is bowin' [to you].. I loves you Brenda!
~d
woven in dark Majesties of your ink.. o purrr
"I'm chaining these bitches
it's time they know who's in charge"
~you had me *here ladyluvs!
"He moves silently though with force
fucks my soul tenderly
obscenely beautiful
yet will smack you down if needed"
~um.. yes plsss... ?! I must say favs to your sexy plus smack down here-
tho you make it [sweetly] hard to choose.. ;)
lovely captures of ordered ranking chaos..
*this beeach is bowin' [to you].. I loves you Brenda!
~d
10th Nov 2015 8:24pm
lovely d~ love you lady and your beautiful thoughts on my writes thank you :)
love Brenda
love Brenda
10th Nov 2015 9:59am
No one sells out to the dark forces better than you Crim! Another STELLAR spill... :)
10th Nov 2015 8:25pm
Darkness owns my soul what can I say thank you for your beautiful comment :)
love Crim
love Crim
10th Nov 2015 11:20pm
....anytime you open a poem with some biting and some tearing and some squirming and demons running and shit, you know it's about to be GOOD! lol....
Deliciously dark. Crim, I love when your pen goes pitch black....
Deliciously dark. Crim, I love when your pen goes pitch black....
11th Nov 2015 3:01am
11th Nov 2015 3:38pm
It's a credit to you as a writer that I can take this as a metaphor for rising through the ranks in any walk of life :-)
very cleverly constructed and fascinating read - like much:-)
very cleverly constructed and fascinating read - like much:-)
12th Nov 2015 10:02am
11th Nov 2015 6:44pm
12th Nov 2015 10:03am
thank you DC most graciously for a beautiful comment and for making me smile :)
love Crim
love Crim
12th Nov 2015 10:22pm
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