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Stuck on Him
the essence of incense
throaty laughter denying
its on the right side of sins
unfaithfulness in salty swallows
stuck on the gratification
from flesh no bigger than a palm
and muscles strained
on achieving the brief death
brilliant white light with no shadows
neither right nor wrong
craving forgetfulness for that moment
to feel the shattering of senses
floating in euphoric clouds
questions in the morning
was it as good for you
as it was for me
fruits eaten in the sly
sugar sucked body stuck
on the need for impalement
like a perpetual masochistic vampire
she was stuck on him
in every way
prisoner of her own desire
and his lusty offerings.
throaty laughter denying
its on the right side of sins
unfaithfulness in salty swallows
stuck on the gratification
from flesh no bigger than a palm
and muscles strained
on achieving the brief death
brilliant white light with no shadows
neither right nor wrong
craving forgetfulness for that moment
to feel the shattering of senses
floating in euphoric clouds
questions in the morning
was it as good for you
as it was for me
fruits eaten in the sly
sugar sucked body stuck
on the need for impalement
like a perpetual masochistic vampire
she was stuck on him
in every way
prisoner of her own desire
and his lusty offerings.
Published 9th Nov 2015
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Anonymous
9th Nov 2015 3:33am
Oh my, my . . . I thought the title of this poem was "Suck on Him."
Damn! Shows you where my mind is.
I would comment more, but I am wasted on cheap California burgundy!
So sorry, my dear friend.
Damn! Shows you where my mind is.
I would comment more, but I am wasted on cheap California burgundy!
So sorry, my dear friend.
9th Nov 2015 4:23am
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9th Nov 2015 4:22am
I should have said fist..':)I love that you read that. Its not erotica that way of course...but you got it anyway. Thanks for reading Todski28. Humbled.
Anonymous
9th Nov 2015 3:20pm
Grace,
Loving how "she" struggles with her internal conflict. Yet, remaining stuck on her wants and needs.
Love your line: "....stuck on the need for impalement
like a perpetual masochistic vampire"
tornado
Loving how "she" struggles with her internal conflict. Yet, remaining stuck on her wants and needs.
Love your line: "....stuck on the need for impalement
like a perpetual masochistic vampire"
tornado
9th Nov 2015 11:28pm
Hi Tornado, I think most of us are stuck that way.:) if only you get the right stake. haha! Thanks for reading.
9th Nov 2015 3:41pm
A clever poem, the equivalent in sex of the anti-hero The first stanza sets the scene well;.a poem about an unhealthy state of mind .Complete opposite to erotica yet using the same materials..I shall keep this
9th Nov 2015 11:29pm
9th Nov 2015 6:32pm
I can become dependent on your erotica, Grace. You have a truly unique perspective.
"stuck on the gratification
from flesh no bigger than a palm
and muscles strained
on achieving the brief death"
You manage to avoid crude or clinical terms, which is refreshing. There's elegance to the "brief death."
"stuck on the gratification
from flesh no bigger than a palm
and muscles strained
on achieving the brief death"
You manage to avoid crude or clinical terms, which is refreshing. There's elegance to the "brief death."
9th Nov 2015 11:32pm
Crowfly, thank you. Splashing out genitalia with ankle deep bodily fluids...thats alright too. But getting there doesn't have to be 'in your face' I think. Haha...thanks for reading...I appreciate you and your opinion as always,
9th Nov 2015 10:23pm
"...... Its not erotica that way of course...but you got it anyway."
Grace, this was exquisitely and very intellectually done. Your words bleed such a strong, sensual message here. Beautifully coded symbolism:
".....the right side of sins unfaithfulness in salty swallows "
".... the gratification from flesh no bigger than a palm
and muscles strained on achieving the brief death" and
"....craving forgetfulness for that moment to feel the shattering of senses" (she speaks of the moments and desires of orgasmic bliss)
and my favorite line:
".......body stuck on the need for impalement
like a perpetual masochistic vampire "
Grace, I am aroused. I feel the wetness of your panties and wet thighs through your words. I have followed a lot of your writing over the years and this exudes more heady sexuality than anything I've read from you ever before. Todeski28 states that he " wouldn't classify this as erotic, though it has erotic overtones ...."
I have to beg to differ 🙆 Really love this side of your literocity.........
Grace, this was exquisitely and very intellectually done. Your words bleed such a strong, sensual message here. Beautifully coded symbolism:
".....the right side of sins unfaithfulness in salty swallows "
".... the gratification from flesh no bigger than a palm
and muscles strained on achieving the brief death" and
"....craving forgetfulness for that moment to feel the shattering of senses" (she speaks of the moments and desires of orgasmic bliss)
and my favorite line:
".......body stuck on the need for impalement
like a perpetual masochistic vampire "
Grace, I am aroused. I feel the wetness of your panties and wet thighs through your words. I have followed a lot of your writing over the years and this exudes more heady sexuality than anything I've read from you ever before. Todeski28 states that he " wouldn't classify this as erotic, though it has erotic overtones ...."
I have to beg to differ 🙆 Really love this side of your literocity.........
9th Nov 2015 11:35pm
hi MrM. Thank you so much for reading me...really reading me, that is. Honoured.
