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The Anatomy of Nothing
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I do not weep for things I have not seen
Temporary warm winds of September
Crows preaching silence
Two bored nymphs
Remembering disfigured seasons
Shadows, as long as sun..flower
One thought, one symbol.
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Outside, the rain beat ten-thousand lashes
Against confessional screens
Washing chalk tattoo from grin to grief
Shrunk beneath rainbow leaves
A mausoleum of regrets, fettered dust
Fading in solitary crib
The heart in lust.
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I dug through the soft earth
Soaked in dark maple
An architecture of cluttered bones
Mismatched loins, revealing dark seed
Bleeding rust in doom
Lain still before virginal snow
A tangled taste of bittersweet.
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I looked away
Holding shards of the night
In my hands
Tomorrow...perhaps.
Thank you G for everything but most of all for the (.) ;)
Photo credit: Blacksoul ...One life + one :)
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Re. The Anatomy of Nothing
Anonymous
30th Oct 2015 1:44am
That's uh...just a fucking beautiful piece of work. What else is there to say.

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30th Oct 2015 2:05am
Thank you mister 50 for liking it :)
I'm not even sure where the idea came from but it all came from couple of scribbles at work which turned into this.
I'm not even sure where the idea came from but it all came from couple of scribbles at work which turned into this.
Re. The Anatomy of Nothing
30th Oct 2015 2:47am
Rina some of the imagery in this is absolutely stunning.
I dug through the soft earth
Soaked in dark maple
An architecture of cluttered bones
Mismatched loins,
I don't know how many times I have encountered this but never thought to write about it.
Beautifully done.
I dug through the soft earth
Soaked in dark maple
An architecture of cluttered bones
Mismatched loins,
I don't know how many times I have encountered this but never thought to write about it.
Beautifully done.
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6th Nov 2015 3:56am
That's actually my favorite stanza too Ahavati.
I've become rather attached to this poem for various reasons and I'm thrilled how well this poem has been received. Thank you for your beautiful comment :)
I've become rather attached to this poem for various reasons and I'm thrilled how well this poem has been received. Thank you for your beautiful comment :)
Re. The Anatomy of Nothing
30th Oct 2015 3:25am
Quite a beautiful kaleidoscope of Imagery and feeling. Leaves me almost breathless trying to grasp the 'shards'. Very nice poem.
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Re: Re. The Anatomy of Nothing
6th Nov 2015 6:19am
Mister E, the shards became separate units each distinct and yet connected by a common thread, pleased that you liked the depths of it and finding a place in your list. Thank you very much.
Re. The Anatomy of Nothing
30th Oct 2015 7:37am
we made chalk art on the street,
the rain at night washed it away;
so it taught us something,
much as your poem speaks...
the rain at night washed it away;
so it taught us something,
much as your poem speaks...
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Re: Re. The Anatomy of Nothing
6th Nov 2015 6:23am
Everything is symbolic in life its just a matter of observing and learning..and your observations are spot on John, thank you!
Re. The Anatomy of Nothing
30th Oct 2015 8:25am
Damn Vee... Wow, it's stunning!
Th entire piece was, but that first stanza pretty much destroyed me
in it's brilliance! lol
Th entire piece was, but that first stanza pretty much destroyed me
in it's brilliance! lol
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Re: Re. The Anatomy of Nothing
6th Nov 2015 6:27am
PIKM a certain scene was playing in my mind for couple of days and some vivid images came to me, one of them were crows cawing, the rest basically just wrote itself rather quickly.
Destroyed you....lol
hmmm.....;)
Destroyed you....lol
hmmm.....;)
Re. The Anatomy of Nothing
30th Oct 2015 4:49pm
I agree with all the other comments above, fantastic stuff. My favorate line is the opening, but I think it could stand alone as opposed to being included in the first stanza.
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The construction of it was meant for each to stand on its own and yet as a whole paint a focal point which brought all the elements together.
Concise form was also very important to keep the focus without access of fillers, as for the opening lines I agree, a powerful detail and i try to do that every time.
Thanks Matt for your awesome comment, much appreciation.
Concise form was also very important to keep the focus without access of fillers, as for the opening lines I agree, a powerful detail and i try to do that every time.
Thanks Matt for your awesome comment, much appreciation.
Re. The Anatomy of Nothing
30th Oct 2015 5:53pm
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6th Nov 2015 6:55am
Thank you Brenda, There's beauty in everything.. just a matter of finding it with naked eye :)
Re. The Anatomy of Nothing
Anonymous
- Edited 30th Oct 2015 8:24pm
30th Oct 2015 8:21pm
Rina, another brilliant, and beautiful write.. always a pleasure to read your thoughts.. into the list it goes.. with love..
Dave
Dave

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Re: Re. The Anatomy of Nothing
6th Nov 2015 7:07am
Thank you Dave for appreciating this dark theme..although, my dark is never quite dark lol
Somehow it ends up in some kind of beautiful fragments :)
Somehow it ends up in some kind of beautiful fragments :)
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31st Oct 2015 8:04pm
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6th Nov 2015 7:11am
Dean, You're right on the texture in the subtle details, its what brings the poem to life. Thank you very much for enjoying it.
Re. The Anatomy of Nothing
1st Nov 2015 6:44pm
Rina, you are a breath of fresh air on DU, do you know that? :)
Your work is so finely crafted and beautifully delivered, that it makes knowing the poetic side of you such a joy.
A wonderful read!
Your work is so finely crafted and beautifully delivered, that it makes knowing the poetic side of you such a joy.
A wonderful read!
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Re: Re. The Anatomy of Nothing
6th Nov 2015 7:18am
Rain, i'm humbled by such a compliment coming from a skillful writer like you.
This poem is quite special and i'm thrilled that you liked it,thank you so much!
This poem is quite special and i'm thrilled that you liked it,thank you so much!
Re. The Anatomy of Nothing
1st Nov 2015 11:30pm
This is one kick ass write, the elements tht rise from the earth with flesh and bone tht make this an anatomy of existence, birthing. Beautiful as walls Vee :)
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Re: Re. The Anatomy of Nothing
6th Nov 2015 4:13pm
A, Without your photos this wouldn't have breathed life and I'm so grateful for lending your art to this poem.
You never cease to amaze me with your writing and photography with heart of gold, I"m so lucky to have you as my best friend xo
You never cease to amaze me with your writing and photography with heart of gold, I"m so lucky to have you as my best friend xo
Re: Re. The Anatomy of Nothing
7th Nov 2015 00:01am
Awe mi amor, ur welcome and u know I'll always have ur back, through thicky and thin. U mean the world to me and without u my world will be absolute black. This creation of urs is a total masterpiece
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7th Nov 2015 1:12am
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That first stanza is DA BOMB girl!
An architecture of cluttered bones
Mismatched loins, revealing dark seed
Bleeding rust in doom <--------Love it!
If I were the leader of a woman's group, I would preach this......
*UPDATE: LOVE this reading! What a beautiful job you did and what an interesting voice - BRAVO!
An architecture of cluttered bones
Mismatched loins, revealing dark seed
Bleeding rust in doom <--------Love it!
If I were the leader of a woman's group, I would preach this......
*UPDATE: LOVE this reading! What a beautiful job you did and what an interesting voice - BRAVO!
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Re: Re. The Anatomy of Nothing
7th Nov 2015 1:23am
Ba..da...bing!
You're right Lena the first stanza and the opening lines are definitely grabbers and those lines you picked out, most certainly are my favorites.
Now i wish i could be a fly on that wall when you give a speech..you'd rock the place for sure :)
Thanks a bunch girl, i'm thrilled you liked this.
You're right Lena the first stanza and the opening lines are definitely grabbers and those lines you picked out, most certainly are my favorites.
Now i wish i could be a fly on that wall when you give a speech..you'd rock the place for sure :)
Thanks a bunch girl, i'm thrilled you liked this.
Re. The Anatomy of Nothing
2nd Nov 2015 1:21pm
this was Amazing to say the least...ahhh Vee you make words come to life ..and dance...like a branch in a breeze...the imagery, context, and content of this ink was simply Breathtaking!!! this goes on my long list of favs by you..i enjoyed immensely
fav lines:
Outside, the rain beat ten-thousand lashes
Against confessional screens
Washing chalk tattoo from grin to grief
Shrunk beneath rainbow leaves
A mausoleum of regrets, fettered dust :) sooo beautifully haunting along with the pic it instantly made me think of this Harry Kemp quote " Where the vast cloudless sky was broken by one crow I sat upon a hill - all alone - long ago; But I never felt so lonely and so out of God's way, As here, where I brush elbows with a thousand every day." ok i rambled long enough in this comment(sorry) but love this
fav lines:
Outside, the rain beat ten-thousand lashes
Against confessional screens
Washing chalk tattoo from grin to grief
Shrunk beneath rainbow leaves
A mausoleum of regrets, fettered dust :) sooo beautifully haunting along with the pic it instantly made me think of this Harry Kemp quote " Where the vast cloudless sky was broken by one crow I sat upon a hill - all alone - long ago; But I never felt so lonely and so out of God's way, As here, where I brush elbows with a thousand every day." ok i rambled long enough in this comment(sorry) but love this
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Re: Re. The Anatomy of Nothing
7th Nov 2015 2:14pm
Wow what a great quote PD, I must look it up to get a greater sense of the narration.
Sometimes the most beautiful writes come effortlessly, not to discount good edits/editing but i find that the ones who need the least and sort of write themselves are true poems in every sense of the world and I have to say; this fits in that category.
Thank you so much for liking it and finding a place on your list, i'm truly humbled by the great praise.
Sometimes the most beautiful writes come effortlessly, not to discount good edits/editing but i find that the ones who need the least and sort of write themselves are true poems in every sense of the world and I have to say; this fits in that category.
Thank you so much for liking it and finding a place on your list, i'm truly humbled by the great praise.
Re. The Anatomy of Nothing
Vee, that's fantastic! It's such a well-crafted and touching poem. I felt the pain within the lines, between the lines ...
"Washing chalk tattoo from grin to grief ..." Just this one line knocked me off my feet.
There's so much in it to adore. Rina ... Wonderful!
Great pics too and G's voice is predestined for bringing out the intensitiy of this gem.
"Washing chalk tattoo from grin to grief ..." Just this one line knocked me off my feet.
There's so much in it to adore. Rina ... Wonderful!
Great pics too and G's voice is predestined for bringing out the intensitiy of this gem.
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Re: Re. The Anatomy of Nothing
7th Nov 2015 2:54pm
Thank you Ms. Chi for this wonderful comment, feedback, support..encouragement.
I'm in poetic heaven lol :))
His voice definitely brought it to life captured with Blacksoul's photos. He's one kickass photographer. I"m sure you have seen his photographs in the group. Super talented guy. Very lucky that I was able to work with both of them.
I'm in poetic heaven lol :))
His voice definitely brought it to life captured with Blacksoul's photos. He's one kickass photographer. I"m sure you have seen his photographs in the group. Super talented guy. Very lucky that I was able to work with both of them.
Re. The Anatomy of Nothing
5th Nov 2015 4:54am
Rina, you have created a masterpiece rich with strangely alluring and captivating images. I. Love, love, love these two passages:
"Two bored nymphs remembering disfigured seasons" and "Outside the rain beat ten-thousand lashes against confessional screens" I cannot tell you why I like this piece so much because I don't know why the hell iI like it so much...just something I feel in my "mismatched loins" I guess. Bravisima bella poeta!
"Two bored nymphs remembering disfigured seasons" and "Outside the rain beat ten-thousand lashes against confessional screens" I cannot tell you why I like this piece so much because I don't know why the hell iI like it so much...just something I feel in my "mismatched loins" I guess. Bravisima bella poeta!
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mmmm GW, I can't tell you either why I like this so much, but I do too.
I think the elements of simply vocabulary with strong and deep imagery makes it stand out. There are no complicated words that one has to thumb the dictionary. It's a simple lay out, almost like a black and white photograph, two dimensional and its up to the reader to take it to the third dimension and it looks like it's a winning combination.
I'm very glad the (.) inspired your Senryu, truly flattering that as colleagues we're able to do that, you did a beautiful job with it and I'm thrilled that this poem was so deeply appreciated by you, thank you my friend :)
I think the elements of simply vocabulary with strong and deep imagery makes it stand out. There are no complicated words that one has to thumb the dictionary. It's a simple lay out, almost like a black and white photograph, two dimensional and its up to the reader to take it to the third dimension and it looks like it's a winning combination.
I'm very glad the (.) inspired your Senryu, truly flattering that as colleagues we're able to do that, you did a beautiful job with it and I'm thrilled that this poem was so deeply appreciated by you, thank you my friend :)
Re. The Anatomy of Nothing
7th Nov 2015 9:05pm
I keep re-reading this to see more each time what you see
A stunning first verse
A stunning first verse
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Re: Re. The Anatomy of Nothing
8th Nov 2015 3:17pm
Thank you Whale, someday I may take that first verse and expand on it further concentrating on that particular imagery alone.
Much appreciation for liking it and finding a place in your RL. It's always good to see you, you always come back with such great wisdom from around the world.
Much appreciation for liking it and finding a place in your RL. It's always good to see you, you always come back with such great wisdom from around the world.
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25th May 2016 4:02pm
Thank you so much Mister Kexby.
This piece is very special to me and I'm thrilled that you liked it.
This piece is very special to me and I'm thrilled that you liked it.
Re. The Anatomy of Nothing
Anonymous
- Edited 16th Jun 2016 11:18pm
16th Jun 2016 11:17pm
Stunning! What a beautiful work! My heart is so enlivened by this! Ah! It's so subtle, so carefully crafted and to such profound effect. I am inspired.

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16th Jun 2016 11:28pm
Thank you Charlotte for your beautiful comment and I'm so glad I discovered your profile and your poetry today. You're a rarity and as I've mentioned in my pm to you, your talent both in visual and written form, makes it a winning combo. I will continue to read and support you, welcome to du :)