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The beginning: Lillith's Revenge
Ha! God thought he was so clever in creating me,
Such confidence in his mastery.
From soil with Adam,
A piece of work there for sure.
And I give God credit,
There was definent glory in my curve.
But to think Adams ego
would ever want me any
place but bitch seat!?
To put Lillith on her back
spread legged while he ride?
Hell No!!
Let that vapid Eve do Adams bidding.
I took off!
Only thing I spread on my back?
My wing.
And then his plot to punish me...
Laughable now,
But in the beginning, such pain.
He took my precious hundred children..
Gave trechturous heavenly birth in vain..
But i got back with hell bitch ironic comuppance.
My lullaby,
earthly women fear me with "Lillith abide."
Erase me from history?
My name lives in infamy,
In every song softly sung to their children 'for sleep.
Afraid they asphyxiate by my hand
in their gentle slumber.
And i take my ride in ecstasy
on their husbands.
Seduce their dreams..
turn liquid their desire,
Collect their pearly seed.
Now by night i sit in pearch watching.
Screech "Who! Who!" will be next..?
Poor man, teehee, next sucker watch out!
Lillith is cumming to make you her own kinda Adam..
Desperate pawn in my plan.
I am exacting Lillith's revenge...
Fear me!
Such confidence in his mastery.
From soil with Adam,
A piece of work there for sure.
And I give God credit,
There was definent glory in my curve.
But to think Adams ego
would ever want me any
place but bitch seat!?
To put Lillith on her back
spread legged while he ride?
Hell No!!
Let that vapid Eve do Adams bidding.
I took off!
Only thing I spread on my back?
My wing.
And then his plot to punish me...
Laughable now,
But in the beginning, such pain.
He took my precious hundred children..
Gave trechturous heavenly birth in vain..
But i got back with hell bitch ironic comuppance.
My lullaby,
earthly women fear me with "Lillith abide."
Erase me from history?
My name lives in infamy,
In every song softly sung to their children 'for sleep.
Afraid they asphyxiate by my hand
in their gentle slumber.
And i take my ride in ecstasy
on their husbands.
Seduce their dreams..
turn liquid their desire,
Collect their pearly seed.
Now by night i sit in pearch watching.
Screech "Who! Who!" will be next..?
Poor man, teehee, next sucker watch out!
Lillith is cumming to make you her own kinda Adam..
Desperate pawn in my plan.
I am exacting Lillith's revenge...
Fear me!
Written by
calamitygin
(Jennifer Michael McCurry)
Published 25th Sep 2015
| Edited 29th Sep 2015
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Re. The beginning: Lillith's Revenge
Anonymous
25th Sep 2015 4:07pm
Jennifer, this is brilliantly written.. so much power in your words.. cunning, and vengeful.. love the contrast, and balance.. into the list it goes.. with love, and respect....
Dave
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Re. The beginning: Lillith's Revenge
25th Sep 2015 4:08pm
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25th Sep 2015 4:10pm
Thank you sweet Brenda, getting to my reads soon. Always exited to see u have sumpthin up.
💋Jennifer
💋Jennifer
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Re. The beginning: Lillith's Revenge
Anonymous
- Edited 25th Sep 2015 4:18pm
25th Sep 2015 4:17pm
Eh . . . I think secretly every woman thinks along these lines which you have penned here. Carry on! Revenge eveen upon the carnage you have wrought..
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25th Sep 2015 4:28pm
Re. The beginning: Lillith's Revenge
25th Sep 2015 6:43pm
Off to a powerful start if this is the first of a series. My favorite lines:
"And i take my ride in ecstasy
on their husbands.
Seduce their dreams..
turn liquid their desire,
Collect their pearly seed."
Spoken like a true succubus. I enjoyed all of this, and I'm looking forward to Lilith's progress. Thrilling work Jennifer!
"And i take my ride in ecstasy
on their husbands.
Seduce their dreams..
turn liquid their desire,
Collect their pearly seed."
Spoken like a true succubus. I enjoyed all of this, and I'm looking forward to Lilith's progress. Thrilling work Jennifer!
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25th Sep 2015 9:23pm
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25th Sep 2015 11:00pm
"Only thing I spread on my back?
My wing. "
~echoes r abounding after this line. powers!
"Erase me from history?
My name lives in infamy,
In every song softly sung to their children 'for sleep. "
~wicked lullabies.. my fav! ..in squeaks* of excitement..
"And i take my ride in ecstasy
on their husbands.
Seduce their dreams..
turn liquid their desire,
Collect their pearly seed. "
~most fav capture.. the dark allure & intent is gd perfect..
lovin ur beginning in this endeavor creampuff! be waitin in squirm fer the next..
know ur mind & it's gonna be drippy..o yes..;)
much luvinz Jen darlins!
~d
My wing. "
~echoes r abounding after this line. powers!
"Erase me from history?
My name lives in infamy,
In every song softly sung to their children 'for sleep. "
~wicked lullabies.. my fav! ..in squeaks* of excitement..
"And i take my ride in ecstasy
on their husbands.
Seduce their dreams..
turn liquid their desire,
Collect their pearly seed. "
~most fav capture.. the dark allure & intent is gd perfect..
lovin ur beginning in this endeavor creampuff! be waitin in squirm fer the next..
know ur mind & it's gonna be drippy..o yes..;)
much luvinz Jen darlins!
~d
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25th Sep 2015 11:15pm
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26th Sep 2015 00:48am
"But to think Adams ego
would ever would ever want me any
place but bitch seat!?
To put Lillith on her back
spread legged while he ride?
Hell No!!
Let that vapid Eve do Adams bidding.
So i took off,
Only thing I spread on my back?
My wing."
wow you went in on fire in this piece Jenn... brilliant, clever and funny all in one :)
would ever would ever want me any
place but bitch seat!?
To put Lillith on her back
spread legged while he ride?
Hell No!!
Let that vapid Eve do Adams bidding.
So i took off,
Only thing I spread on my back?
My wing."
wow you went in on fire in this piece Jenn... brilliant, clever and funny all in one :)
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26th Sep 2015 00:53am
Re. The beginning: Lillith's Revenge
26th Sep 2015 1:17am
A stunning haha poem Jennifer. I really got off on the tone of this poem. Smart prose...how you cull everything together and capture Lillith's voice,
I imagine you reading this poem at midnight at an open mic...dressed like stevie nicks and just as bad ass.
I imagine you reading this poem at midnight at an open mic...dressed like stevie nicks and just as bad ass.
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Re. The beginning: Lillith's Revenge
26th Sep 2015 1:23am
Re. The beginning: Lillith's Revenge
"There was definent glory in my curve." ... I think we're channeling Lilith today. :)~ Love this fierce, vibrant, and empowering ink! - blue angel
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26th Sep 2015 3:28am
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26th Sep 2015 6:13pm
Rarely does one say "God is only human". But often we hear "to err is to be human". But you have taken the role in this poem invoked through Lilith. And you don't question her. Only listen. This is a wicked taunt, Calamity full of heat. Excellent!
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26th Sep 2015 6:30pm
Ahh, thanks so so much DP, you always give such thougtful wise commentary, thrilled when i see your name and cant wait to read.
💋Jennifer
💋Jennifer
Re. The beginning: Lillith's Revenge
27th Sep 2015 5:12am
You are one powerful beeeyotch...lol...I felt the aggressive vibration through the whole read,...well done
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27th Sep 2015 5:17am
Callme beeyotch agin doll darya! Lol just teasin...thanks kitten...
💋💋Jennifer
💋💋Jennifer
Re. The beginning: Lillith's Revenge
28th Sep 2015 10:43pm
Wow Jen!!!! The power of vengeance in your pen this time, wrought upon men everywhere. A true succubus with us tonight. Can't wait to see part two.
John
John
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28th Sep 2015 10:48pm
Tbank you, working on it with a wonderful guest star. Gonna have a few men for a midnight snack, offer still stands to write with me.
💋Jen
💋Jen
Re. The beginning: Lillith's Revenge
29th Sep 2015 00:04am
You mix myth with humor into an intoxicating narrative. I love it when a woman stands her ground. Your Lilith is my dream woman.
John
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29th Sep 2015 00:36am
Lol Right on, love that Golden, just read "Aftermath of seduction" Jeez, hope thats correct.
Totally hooked on your words. Just insane perfection.
Totally in awe, panting in your wake and screams for more. Ill tell you how i really feel another time lol
💋Jennifer
Totally hooked on your words. Just insane perfection.
Totally in awe, panting in your wake and screams for more. Ill tell you how i really feel another time lol
💋Jennifer
Re. The beginning: Lillith's Revenge
30th Sep 2015 1:06am
I love knowing how you feel my new found friend. In my imagination I am feeding your grapes and rubbing your shoulders. Then that would lead to ... You are the cherry on my sundae. ;-)
Hugs,
John
Hugs,
John
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30th Sep 2015 1:10am