deepundergroundpoetry.com
For Sir
vexed with myself
words spoken in haste
I was remiss with your heart
deserving of your displeasure
I await your Dominant presence
going through withdrawal
addicted to the rush
that you inject
with your forceful nature
fearful I will kick cold turkey
for my callous tongue
slicing words spoken carelessly
wishing I could take them back
swallow them down
send them back to the pit they sprang from
be Brenda to you always
let Crimsin die a lonely death
the whore with a hardened vessel
that spoke to you thusly
with harsh undertones
coming in quietly in submission
with hopes my offering
is pleasing, healing
that the rift I created is mendable
on bruised knees I await you
should you shine your light
on this darkened heart
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
likes 22
reading list entries 4
comments 42
reads 1288
Commenting Preference:
The author encourages honest critique.
Re. For Sir
I hope the rift is just a hairline crack and will heal. This is a sweet submission, Brenda, and I imagine your "Sir" will listen. How could he not? This is fine, thoughtful writing. Personally, I would hate to see Crimsin die. She's a hell raiser but lots of fun. Excellent work Brenda and Crimsin!
1
Re: Re. For Sir
22nd Sep 2015 5:24pm
thank you Sir Crow Crimsin won't die her face will emerge hopefully not lashing out at the ones I care for..
with love Crim
with love Crim
Re: Re. For Sir
22nd Sep 2015 5:25pm
Re. For Sir
22nd Sep 2015 6:32pm
Lines weaving amends. Echoes finding their end. Sweet Sin, your voice penetrates the darkness, lovingly. Savors the ink, blue angel
2
Re: Re. For Sir
23rd Sep 2015 2:40am
Re. For Sir
22nd Sep 2015 6:45pm
Really nice Brenda. I think you would make a strong and lovely offering to anyone.
Beautiful write.
💋Jennifer
Beautiful write.
💋Jennifer
2
Re: Re. For Sir
23rd Sep 2015 2:41am
Re. For Sir
22nd Sep 2015 7:39pm
Re: Re. For Sir
23rd Sep 2015 2:42am
Anonymous
- Edited 25th Sep 2020 3:45am
22nd Sep 2015 7:59pm
<< post removed >>
Re: Re. For Sir
23rd Sep 2015 2:43am
thank you beautiful one for loving the whole me and for such lovely and wise thoughts..
I love you Brenda :)
I love you Brenda :)
Re. For Sir
22nd Sep 2015 8:14pm
You being this openly submissive
sounds like a person with a big love filled heart, can't imagine darkness
resides there. :)
sounds like a person with a big love filled heart, can't imagine darkness
resides there. :)
2
Re: Re. For Sir
23rd Sep 2015 2:44am
the darkness emerges from time to time..
thank you Poe for seeing beauty in my heart with love Crim
thank you Poe for seeing beauty in my heart with love Crim
Re. For Sir
22nd Sep 2015 9:40pm
"be Brenda to you always
let Crimsin die a lonely death
the whore with a hardened vessel"<--- damn! that was badass self-description.
Crim, I absolutely adore how raw you are. Xo
let Crimsin die a lonely death
the whore with a hardened vessel"<--- damn! that was badass self-description.
Crim, I absolutely adore how raw you are. Xo
2
Re: Re. For Sir
23rd Sep 2015 2:45am
Re. For Sir
22nd Sep 2015 9:45pm
Great job on this poem Brenda I love it keep up the great work you're awesome
2
Re: Re. For Sir
23rd Sep 2015 2:47am
thank you Kavik for making me smile you're pretty awesome yourself :)
with love Brenda
with love Brenda
Re. For Sir
22nd Sep 2015 10:37pm
Re: Re. For Sir
23rd Sep 2015 2:48am
Re. For Sir
Anonymous
22nd Sep 2015 10:57pm
Miss Crim, Miss Crim. . .I've had that "sir" in my life. . .so I understand the feeling. . .genuine and heartfelt ink, I want to weep with you. . .xoxo, Devlin.
1
Re: Re. For Sir
23rd Sep 2015 2:49am
thank you Lady Devlin for a loving comment and relating..
don't worry the hard part of me will emerge when needed :)
with love Crim
don't worry the hard part of me will emerge when needed :)
with love Crim
Re. For Sir
22nd Sep 2015 11:01pm
oh the things I've said I'd wished I hadn't -
quite a few of my poems, for instance..:)
but this is a beautiful poem, Crim...
quite a few of my poems, for instance..:)
but this is a beautiful poem, Crim...
1
Re: Re. For Sir
23rd Sep 2015 2:50am
thank you kindly Paul for understanding and for a lovely comment :)
with love Crim
with love Crim
Re. For Sir
23rd Sep 2015 1:54am
Ms Brenda, this was an honest from the heart write. This could never come from a place of darkness.
I believe your heart is full of love. I hope sir can see the beautiful, wonderful person before him.
Keith
I believe your heart is full of love. I hope sir can see the beautiful, wonderful person before him.
Keith
1
Re: Re. For Sir
23rd Sep 2015 2:51am
Re. For Sir
23rd Sep 2015 2:00am
two lovers in one woman, w/different approaches, but both need love. nice work, Crim & Brenda...
1
Re: Re. For Sir
23rd Sep 2015 2:53am
thank you John for understanding both sides of my nature need loving :)
with love Crim
with love Crim
Re. For Sir
23rd Sep 2015 4:33am
Regret is a horrible thing, but at least you have the option of atonement, enjoy it :)
1
Re: Re. For Sir
23rd Sep 2015 5:18am
Anonymous
- Edited 2nd Jul 2024 3:45am
23rd Sep 2015 5:14am
<< post removed >>
Re: Re. For Sir
your words reached through the screen.. through the ether waves and touched my deep in my soul I feel you hugging me tightly embracing you right back.. thank you Johnny with deep respect and appreciation you truly made my week..
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. For Sir
This "Sir" is a fool for letting a treasure such as you slip from his grasp. This is a heartfelt scribe.
1
Re: Re. For Sir
23rd Sep 2015 3:57pm
Re. For Sir
23rd Sep 2015 5:49pm
Re: Re. For Sir
24th Sep 2015 4:34pm
Re. For Sir
Anonymous
23rd Sep 2015 6:40pm
Brenda, this is pure brilliance.. how your commanding presence bleeds through your words.. just beautifully done.. with love...
Dave
Dave
1
Re: Re. For Sir
24th Sep 2015 4:35pm
Re: Re. For Sir
7th Oct 2015 7:23pm