Summer Cycle

Eh honestly it wasn't your best, but it wasn't bad
It just didn't seem upbeat enough to be in this category

I wrote a single haikou for a "summer time" or something forum and thought "might as well make it an actual thing". Just something light hearted and easy for me to write while I'm contemplating what to write about next. But yea I agree, not going in my portfolio to bioware. :)

Yeah, but don't get me wrong I still think you're a great writer but I just think you could of done better.
However, I can't wait to see what you have next up your sleeve :)

Ohhhhhh you're calling me out huh Rocky? Well damn me if I don't deliver, Ive got to match the high expectations, and I'm up to challenge. :)

Lol no I'm not calling you out!
I'm just brutally honest :)

To MsRockyJackson: Constructive criticism on your comment:   "Could HAVE done better"     would be the appropriate term.

I COMPLETELY relate to the morning haiku

I WISH I could relate to the afternoon and evening haiku...both seem like places I'd love to be!

Perks of a home on the coast Quin. I may spend alot of my time in front of a computer screen, but the outside's nice sometimes too. I can now only write poetry on my hammock swing, even the grass has been folded down to where my feet are comfortable. :D

My response (first verse only changed by one word - more of a senryu than haiku) - I would have posted in my poems, but met the quota for today already

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Morning

rise and shine sunrise,
alarm clock hibernation,
just five more minutes.


Afternoon

ticks on clocks seem stuck
annoying glow, shrill phone rings
five o'clock, please come


Evening

traffic. horns blare loud
precious hour wasted in line
few till tomorrow

*applause* I like the evening one especially, harkens me back to my late night shifts trying to support myself. :)

I inspired someone. :')