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The Big Beneath
She tries to pick a catchy name
And finally opts for "Betty Blue"
But refuses to accept the blame
If it doesn't quite ring true
"Betty" selects her patsy well
A schmuck too short on luck
For a price she's going to give him hell
And throw in his final fuck
She rides him 'til the rising sun
Slamming him on top
Somehow manages to lift his gun
Then squeeze him for every drop
He still can't seem to comprehend
Why she'd nail him for his cash
Then saying "Sorry babe looks like the end
You're going out with the trash"
"Betty" drops him in the nearest bin
Just as his black bag starts to drip
Says "Sweet babe paid the price for sin
But it was worth the trip."
And finally opts for "Betty Blue"
But refuses to accept the blame
If it doesn't quite ring true
"Betty" selects her patsy well
A schmuck too short on luck
For a price she's going to give him hell
And throw in his final fuck
She rides him 'til the rising sun
Slamming him on top
Somehow manages to lift his gun
Then squeeze him for every drop
He still can't seem to comprehend
Why she'd nail him for his cash
Then saying "Sorry babe looks like the end
You're going out with the trash"
"Betty" drops him in the nearest bin
Just as his black bag starts to drip
Says "Sweet babe paid the price for sin
But it was worth the trip."
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9th Jul 2015 4:52pm
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9th Jul 2015 4:56pm
You can't have her Virginia! I have her booked up for the foreseeable future. But stick around, let's see what happens...
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9th Jul 2015 6:45pm
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9th Jul 2015 10:44pm
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9th Jul 2015 10:02pm
Fucking Eva Green, I would play the schmuck. Flawless rhyme and flow on this one Crow. Excellent!
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9th Jul 2015 10:45pm
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WOW I love this Crow!!
I love the whole patsy reference and the Betty Blue!!
U knocked this way out the park!
in the list brah!!!
loves you Zazzles xoxoxo
I love the whole patsy reference and the Betty Blue!!
U knocked this way out the park!
in the list brah!!!
loves you Zazzles xoxoxo
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9th Jul 2015 10:47pm
There's actually a French film called "Betty Blue." I borrowed the name but not the content. Thanks Jackie!
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Anonymous
9th Jul 2015 11:08pm
I think I line this lady! Well done, crow. Well done.
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10th Jul 2015 6:31pm
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Anonymous
10th Jul 2015 00:32am
Crow you brighten my day with things your imagination inks out......you're just awesome......enjoyed this......xo :)
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10th Jul 2015 6:33pm
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Anonymous
11th Jul 2015 2:57am
Awe......your an awesome man with a simple want.....xo :)
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Re: The Big Beneath
10th Jul 2015 7:23am
she'll take your dollar & make you holler. the dame who takes the blame...
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10th Jul 2015 6:30pm
I fight compulsive rhyming disorder, but I just pack it up and head for the border. Thanks John.
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5th Aug 2015 5:15am
Keep bandying the ante for rhyme vigilante stands! Your work is pure anti-hero candy!
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