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Crose
Elegant even in mourning
And dressed in designer black
The most composed of us observes
"We have always been dysfunctional"
Actually lightening the mood as we seek closure
"The curse of the Crows" our youngest quips
Forcing a smile to his pale lips
He can't help but recall early demonstrations
Initial symptoms of OCD
Flare ups of childhood rage
Later intervals of morbid silence
And stunted growth in social interaction
Not helped in the least by various substances
Whatever it took to numb his skull
Still later salvaged by a level of recovery
But then years of bad choices, quiet breakdowns
And an amusing variety of diagnosis
Amazed he's still standing, really
A matter of regret or gratitude
A tough call as he lowers a single rose.
And dressed in designer black
The most composed of us observes
"We have always been dysfunctional"
Actually lightening the mood as we seek closure
"The curse of the Crows" our youngest quips
Forcing a smile to his pale lips
He can't help but recall early demonstrations
Initial symptoms of OCD
Flare ups of childhood rage
Later intervals of morbid silence
And stunted growth in social interaction
Not helped in the least by various substances
Whatever it took to numb his skull
Still later salvaged by a level of recovery
But then years of bad choices, quiet breakdowns
And an amusing variety of diagnosis
Amazed he's still standing, really
A matter of regret or gratitude
A tough call as he lowers a single rose.
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re: Re: Crose
30th Jun 2015 00:27am
The chin's kind of at mid-level at this point, but working on it. Comments like yours help immeasurably. Thank you sweet Taryn!
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29th Jun 2015 4:49pm
Feel the sting on this one! Such suffering. As always,
beautifully written! :)
beautifully written! :)
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re: Re: Crose
30th Jun 2015 00:30am
Thank you Tommie. This life isn't entirely characterized by suffering, thank God. I just wish my memory was a bit more selective.
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Anonymous
29th Jun 2015 4:58pm
Our lives with such differing paths, your skilled words bring in to reality.
Very touching write.
Very touching write.
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30th Jun 2015 00:33am
It's a matter of choosing the right one. Shortcuts are usually a bad idea. Thanks so much Slowgasm!
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29th Jun 2015 4:58pm
Just like the former comments, this stings, Crow. Just painful. The introspection is contrite and blurry, intimate and ripe with despair. I think maybe all of us feel this. Love to you, Crow. You are so very valued here because of your unique ability to distinguish the human experience. This is agonizingly beautiful...
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30th Jun 2015 00:41am
Great comment Virginia. Your words always give me a lift. Introspection has its value but, in my case, I try to keep it to a minimum exactly for the reasons you cite. Thank you!
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30th Jun 2015 00:42am
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29th Jun 2015 8:38pm
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Anonymous
29th Jun 2015 10:29pm
THIS is "a Beautiful Poem". . .vividly pinned, very thought out/thought through. . .Enjoyed. . .xoxo, Devlin.
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re: Re: Crose
30th Jun 2015 00:45am
Thank you beautiful Devlin. I did give this one a little more thought than usual. Maybe too much...
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Anonymous
30th Jun 2015 1:41am
No...it's just right;)
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Re: Crose
29th Jun 2015 10:47pm
the angst here presses heavily upon the heart, crowfly...
"But then years of bad choices, quiet
breakdowns And an amusing variety of diagnosis
Amazed he's still standing, really
A matter of regret or gratitude"
... just devastatingly beautiful
xo
"But then years of bad choices, quiet
breakdowns And an amusing variety of diagnosis
Amazed he's still standing, really
A matter of regret or gratitude"
... just devastatingly beautiful
xo
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30th Jun 2015 00:50am
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6th Aug 2015 6:55am
Awww! Self-awareness shared with mindful skill, hence every glimpse just builds! We bare ourselves, and our journeys, and it always fascinates me, the rough patches that really make us who we are. Thanks for always being honest and open comrade crowfly!
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