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Miss Out.
When busy making other plans
We miss our children first step of life
We miss their first smile
We miss their first words
We miss their first day in school
We miss their good moments
We miss their progress in life
And then we miss out on life.
Friends move away, some die
Family disintegrate, enemies take our positions
Our bodies get out of shape
Opportunity pass us by, dreams slip away
Our love life lose flair, alone we become
And then we miss out on life
When we are busy making other plans
Forget not your own self.
We miss our children first step of life
We miss their first smile
We miss their first words
We miss their first day in school
We miss their good moments
We miss their progress in life
And then we miss out on life.
Friends move away, some die
Family disintegrate, enemies take our positions
Our bodies get out of shape
Opportunity pass us by, dreams slip away
Our love life lose flair, alone we become
And then we miss out on life
When we are busy making other plans
Forget not your own self.
Published 13th Jun 2015
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13th Jun 2015 3:05am
Ahhh, mojado-123, luv ~ :-*
What an excellent reminder you give us here! It is too easy to forget to live our lives fully as we plan them or manage the variety of tasks we deem necessary.
Thank you for this well-wrought reminder, luv. :-*
What an excellent reminder you give us here! It is too easy to forget to live our lives fully as we plan them or manage the variety of tasks we deem necessary.
Thank you for this well-wrought reminder, luv. :-*
14th Jun 2015 2:02am
You are much welcomed Savaja. We live in a fast pace world, so reminders are good. thanks
13th Jun 2015 5:18am
I agree! This is a really beautiful poem that you've written. Maybe you could try using some more poetic tools (alliteration, metaphors, etc.) But in the end do whatever you feel comfortable with and whatever you think sounds best!
14th Jun 2015 2:04am
Thanks Greatness for the input I will put that into consideration next time.
