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Loud Silence
collapse in dirty rhythm
underneath it all
with eyes closed
feeling it all
tasting the deep lyrics
on moist buds
twisting melodies as one
wildly marvelous noise
breathing with pulsing movement
sensual moaning
from strangulated throats
shaped liked musical notes
underneath it all
with eyes closed
feeling it all
tasting the deep lyrics
on moist buds
twisting melodies as one
wildly marvelous noise
breathing with pulsing movement
sensual moaning
from strangulated throats
shaped liked musical notes
Published 2nd Jun 2015
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Anonymous
2nd Jun 2015 6:04pm
"breathing with pulsing movement
sensual moaning
from strangulated throats
shaped liked musical notes"
The interweavement in words in this last stanza is just brilliant, Miss Tommie Lynn!. . .Enjoyed the read. . .Devlin;)
sensual moaning
from strangulated throats
shaped liked musical notes"
The interweavement in words in this last stanza is just brilliant, Miss Tommie Lynn!. . .Enjoyed the read. . .Devlin;)
2nd Jun 2015 7:47pm
I struggled with the end a bit,wasn't sure
if I needed more to it so I left it alone. So glad
I did. Thank you Devlin,your word's
are appreciated. :)
if I needed more to it so I left it alone. So glad
I did. Thank you Devlin,your word's
are appreciated. :)
2nd Jun 2015 6:43pm
2nd Jun 2015 7:47pm
2nd Jun 2015 7:44pm
The moaning can be as magnificent as a concerto. Tasting the deep lyrics... "I see your hair is burning / your hills are filled with fire." That's from the Doors' "L.A. Woman." Maybe a few of those flames apply to you. Excellent work Tommie.
2nd Jun 2015 7:51pm
Ah The Doors....talent gone too soon.
You're too kind crowfly,thank you. ;)
You're too kind crowfly,thank you. ;)
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