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You Want to Write a Poem
That’s brave…
To take my life
And eagerly, spitefully
Put in on a page
For others to ogle
To study the ugly corners
And the littered floors
The filmy walls
Brave and bold
Like removing someone’s
Underwear, turning it inside out
Reveling in paltry stains
That aren’t yours
Will never be yours
Will not be yours
You fearlessly stand
With a golden halo
In front of Heaven’s Gates
Waving a white flag
Freshly washed
In my urine
And for that
You will easily be
The heralded hero
Bold and true
You beat this shrew
And discovered the witless charms
Of martyrdom.
To take my life
And eagerly, spitefully
Put in on a page
For others to ogle
To study the ugly corners
And the littered floors
The filmy walls
Brave and bold
Like removing someone’s
Underwear, turning it inside out
Reveling in paltry stains
That aren’t yours
Will never be yours
Will not be yours
You fearlessly stand
With a golden halo
In front of Heaven’s Gates
Waving a white flag
Freshly washed
In my urine
And for that
You will easily be
The heralded hero
Bold and true
You beat this shrew
And discovered the witless charms
Of martyrdom.
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Re: You Want to Write a Poem
Anonymous
22nd May 2015 5:46pm
holy shit.
that's all i got.
literally had to pick my jaw up off the floor. well done, virginia. very well done.
that's all i got.
literally had to pick my jaw up off the floor. well done, virginia. very well done.
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re: Re: You Want to Write a Poem
22nd May 2015 7:19pm
The funny thing is, writing is therapeutic. I am not angry anymore. Thank you, Minverva!
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re: Re: You Want to Write a Poem
22nd May 2015 7:19pm
Re: You Want to Write a Poem
22nd May 2015 6:00pm
I was going to write a comment but I don't know what to write. This was just great. Words, tone, feeling. It spoke to me. Thank you for sharing it with us, your readers.
Jay
Jay
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re: Re: You Want to Write a Poem
22nd May 2015 7:20pm
Re: You Want to Write a Poem
22nd May 2015 7:12pm
This is stunning, Virginia. This is controlled anger, executed with precision and vivid imagery. I think whoever "Poem" addresses should tread very lightly at this point.
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Re: You Want to Write a Poem
Writing is definitely therapeutic. Reading too. It is strange how some public martyrs don the secrets & lives of others to attain the moniker, and then feel accomplished about it.
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Re: You Want to Write a Poem
22nd May 2015 7:38pm
Re: You Want to Write a Poem
Anonymous
22nd May 2015 9:01pm
What I like is how this builds up like sizzling flames, and then is melted into ice.
Sting in ink!
Sting in ink!
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Re: You Want to Write a Poem
23rd May 2015 1:56am
Exacting! You are not silent anymore. "Waving a white flag
Freshly washed In my urine.." is probably my favorite line. To me it really encapsulated the seething aroma of scorn.
Freshly washed In my urine.." is probably my favorite line. To me it really encapsulated the seething aroma of scorn.
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Re: You Want to Write a Poem
23rd May 2015 5:19am
Damn Ms. Petal! I read this out loud through my teeth, it was great fun, haha. So good.
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Re: You Want to Write a Poem
23rd May 2015 7:09am
Re: You Want to Write a Poem
24th May 2015 11:04pm
Haha !
OMG ! my first poem to read on this site ..
And, i want to write a poem , Thank you ;)
OMG ! my first poem to read on this site ..
And, i want to write a poem , Thank you ;)
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Re: You Want to Write a Poem
I don't normally leave two comments, but I read this again and saw something that really stood out. Even though this seemed like an angry rant of sorts, it is actually more well designed than at first glance. You begin with "That's brave..." then later to "brave and bold" then end with "bold and true", like each section was the announcement of a new thought, but carrying the same line of thought. I don't know if this was intentional, but actually found it genius in its own way. I have a lot more respect for this piece, VP!
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Re: You Want to Write a Poem
4th Jun 2015 10:02am
Another beautiful poem love, I love reading your words, much love
-Dimitri
-Dimitri
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