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Maybe I Sound Angry
I think what bothers me the most,
Is that you think I asked you to save me
Assuming I am a damsel in distress
Assuming that what I need is your stand up
Masculinity Morality
To straighten me out;
Smooth my hard and awkward edges.
You are talking to the wrong girl.
What you need
Is one of those blithe caricatures
Adorning the back of a cereal box.
I say…
Put on your cape
And with your blunt, raging
Superman ego
Fly through the vacuous sky
And save that stupid bitch
From all other men
That are just like you.
Is that you think I asked you to save me
Assuming I am a damsel in distress
Assuming that what I need is your stand up
Masculinity Morality
To straighten me out;
Smooth my hard and awkward edges.
You are talking to the wrong girl.
What you need
Is one of those blithe caricatures
Adorning the back of a cereal box.
I say…
Put on your cape
And with your blunt, raging
Superman ego
Fly through the vacuous sky
And save that stupid bitch
From all other men
That are just like you.
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Re: Maybe I Sound Angry
1st Apr 2015 3:52pm
You do sound angry, Virginia, but rightly so. You can do without the macho crap very easily. You're too high powered for that. I'm not sure about the morality. I'd be more concerned with the arrogance, the insufferable certainty that the little woman needs assistance. Your sense of humor saves you (and him) from pure rage. You ridicule the bastard over the breakfast table, pointing out those cartoons on the cereal boxes while he munches away. And then he puts on the Superman threads, not noticing the kryptonite clutched in your fist. I would never even consider trying to iron out those edges. They give you character.
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Re: Maybe I Sound Angry
1st Apr 2015 3:52pm
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Re: Maybe I Sound Angry
Anonymous
1st Apr 2015 4:50pm
a definite maybe, perhaps. Those are some venomous words. The ending is a real kicker. Ouch! You know how to a pack a punch, Petals.
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Re: Maybe I Sound Angry
1st Apr 2015 5:04pm
You have a right to be angry. Nobody should be treated like they need anybody else. You are very capable to conquer whatever you encounter. Much love, sweet Virginia.
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Re: Maybe I Sound Angry
1st Apr 2015 5:04pm
Re: Maybe I Sound Angry
1st Apr 2015 6:45pm
brilliant - a real kick in the balls kinda poem and they deserve it :-)
I thank god I am not as other men :-P
I thank god I am not as other men :-P
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Re: Maybe I Sound Angry
1st Apr 2015 9:22pm
Re: Maybe I Sound Angry
1st Apr 2015 9:24pm
So true that some men think they're being a gentlemen not realizing their ego is fed...i guess this is where the woman chooses to allow it to happen. Cool write!
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Re: Maybe I Sound Angry
Anonymous
1st Apr 2015 9:37pm
Maybe?
I am going to go burn my superman costume now.
and put on my meek mike outfit...good stuff!
I am going to go burn my superman costume now.
and put on my meek mike outfit...good stuff!
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Re: Maybe I Sound Angry
Anonymous
1st Apr 2015 10:30pm
won't you tell us how you really feel? ;) well done. very well done.
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Re: Maybe I Sound Angry
2nd Apr 2015 00:00am
Re: Maybe I Sound Angry
every man's a hero in his own mind, hard to convince the ladies of that; maybe we long for a 'perils of Pauline' world.
it is our great tragedy that we are only men...
it is our great tragedy that we are only men...
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Re: Maybe I Sound Angry
2nd Apr 2015 2:40pm
Totally feelin' this! I too am not a fan of being saved and protected. There's a difference between someone who wants to fight battles for you and someone who will fight them with you. It's a really nice feeling when someone knows you have the strength to take the world on and supports you while you do it. To be deemed incapable and looked at as a fragile piece of glass is more insulting than not.
I don't think this sounds angry, I think it sounds like the voice of a strong woman speaking some hard hitting truth. This is an excellent piece, delivered with just the right amount of fire.
I don't think this sounds angry, I think it sounds like the voice of a strong woman speaking some hard hitting truth. This is an excellent piece, delivered with just the right amount of fire.
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Re: Maybe I Sound Angry
Anonymous
3rd Apr 2015 6:42pm
Mmmmm .... dipped in awesome sauce this was.
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