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Don't! Stop!
"Don't" she said softly as lips meandered and hands wandered.
I don't want to feel this way, she thinks as idle cruising caused instant tremors
"Stop" she said as pressure increased and hands found purchase on hips,
gentle massaging of breasts and teeth dragging across lips
Breathless sighs turned raspy groans
As practical decision succumbs to intuition
Her head drops in surrender and she realizes this battle is for another time, another place
"Don't. Stop. Don't...stop. Don't stop!" She pleads as he heeds her words this time and pushes her over and under.
I don't want to feel this way, she thinks as idle cruising caused instant tremors
"Stop" she said as pressure increased and hands found purchase on hips,
gentle massaging of breasts and teeth dragging across lips
Breathless sighs turned raspy groans
As practical decision succumbs to intuition
Her head drops in surrender and she realizes this battle is for another time, another place
"Don't. Stop. Don't...stop. Don't stop!" She pleads as he heeds her words this time and pushes her over and under.
Published 11th Mar 2015
| Edited 12th Mar 2015
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11th Mar 2015 5:56am
Very sexy ^^
Love that she tries to fight the desires but gives in at the end :-)
Love that she tries to fight the desires but gives in at the end :-)
11th Mar 2015 5:58am
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11th Mar 2015 4:32pm
I just hope it isn't over and under unto death. Your end leaves room for speculation, something for the imagination. Great job, Kandi. Please don't ever cease in your efforts. I'm easy.
11th Mar 2015 8:54pm
I like the over all theme of resistance and overcoming but I have one nit picky objection to the word 'tits'. It's a crass and vulgar word that has no place in a sensual poem like this. I'm not saying it's offensive or anything. It's just something I, personally, don't like. Good job!
12th Mar 2015 2:53am
12th Mar 2015 4:16am
12th Mar 2015 7:36pm
Thank you all as always for your honest critique...@FindingZoe, after re-reading I do tend to agree that tits is out of place for the flow as everything else is silky, sexy, sensual. Changed it to breasts. Thanks for the input :)
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