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Absence Bound
She finally took a fade
Vanished in smoky air
Left without her shade
An echo down the stair
Didn't say au revoir
Left me with my tears
With this lasting scar
With these final fears
But I still hear her song
The music of her smile
It has been too long
Now it might be awhile.
Vanished in smoky air
Left without her shade
An echo down the stair
Didn't say au revoir
Left me with my tears
With this lasting scar
With these final fears
But I still hear her song
The music of her smile
It has been too long
Now it might be awhile.
Published 30th Jan 2015
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30th Jan 2015 3:08pm
30th Jan 2015 3:13pm
Anonymous
30th Jan 2015 3:11pm
Sweet Sir Crow,
Such a haunting, heart wrenching write. Such sadness and disappointment. Much love to u my dear friend.
Lady Muse
Such a haunting, heart wrenching write. Such sadness and disappointment. Much love to u my dear friend.
Lady Muse
30th Jan 2015 3:15pm
30th Jan 2015 3:18pm
" the music of her smile" nice little turn here. Can always expect something good from you, Crow. However, this is the first poem I have read this morning and it's quite melancholy. I wish I could reach over and give you a hug....
30th Jan 2015 3:27pm
30th Jan 2015 3:36pm
Where sorrow clocks the seconds...and the soul listens to the echoes of her memory...
Such a poignantly painful piece!
Sioch`ain leat, mo Chara xo
Such a poignantly painful piece!
Sioch`ain leat, mo Chara xo
30th Jan 2015 3:46pm
30th Jan 2015 3:43pm
Nice reflective and yet yearning feel to this wonderful little poem! Great job Crow~~ Cheers! Scot.
30th Jan 2015 3:47pm
Anonymous
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30th Jan 2015 5:41pm
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30th Jan 2015 8:19pm
Thanks for the hugs, Schiitaryn. For a minute there I visualized being trapped in a net, but now I realize you meant this other kind of net. Whew!
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30th Jan 2015 9:14pm
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30th Jan 2015 10:12pm
Anonymous
31st Jan 2015 4:13am
......and the song plays within your soul.....like an irritating scratch on a record......beautiful sad write....xo :)
31st Jan 2015 4:01pm
Thank you, Flower. "Like and irritating scratch on a record." That's an interesting way to put it. I'll have to pick up the CD!
Anonymous
1st Feb 2015 4:13am
LOL!!! It's what came to my mind......xo :)
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1st Feb 2015 7:01am
sadly touching!
the sound of silence
such a deafening tone;
sorrows isolating us
when tears are cried alone...
the sound of silence
such a deafening tone;
sorrows isolating us
when tears are cried alone...
1st Feb 2015 5:05pm
Thanks, Deborah! Those four lines you included are really impressive. Are they part of a longer poem?
1st Feb 2015 6:11pm
actually... your poem inspired the words
just ran with them
maybe I will play with them a little later tho ;)
just ran with them
maybe I will play with them a little later tho ;)
1st Feb 2015 6:23pm
1st Feb 2015 8:34pm
Anonymous
1st Feb 2015 5:13pm
how did i miss this one?!
oh my heart, crow! the scars that lovers leave are the worst kind. brave write, my friend.
oh my heart, crow! the scars that lovers leave are the worst kind. brave write, my friend.
1st Feb 2015 6:22pm
The scars are particularly bad when the lover doesn't offer much by way of explanation for breaking up. If you don't see it coming it can be devastating. Thanks, Minerva.
