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Wind Dancer
Fairy wings of silver blue sheen,
Shining, shimmering.
Skin pink petal soft
With a glimmer of its own.
Eyes bright and crystal deep blue,
Playful and curious.
Hair spun of golden sun,
Soft and silky,
Carressed by the wind.
Smile warm,
Happy and bright.
Ears pointed,
Delicate as the rest.
Barely dressed
Baring shoulders,
Midriff,
Most of shapely legs,
Following fine figure.
Always barefoot.
Adored by many,
Loved by more.
Marysanna,
Fairychild,
Dancing on the wind.
Shining, shimmering.
Skin pink petal soft
With a glimmer of its own.
Eyes bright and crystal deep blue,
Playful and curious.
Hair spun of golden sun,
Soft and silky,
Carressed by the wind.
Smile warm,
Happy and bright.
Ears pointed,
Delicate as the rest.
Barely dressed
Baring shoulders,
Midriff,
Most of shapely legs,
Following fine figure.
Always barefoot.
Adored by many,
Loved by more.
Marysanna,
Fairychild,
Dancing on the wind.
Published 5th May 2011
| Edited 7th May 2011
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6th May 2011 11:11pm
I'm genuinely surprised that so many of your poems are without comments. You have a gentle and compassionate voice that's clearly your own, as opposed to following trends as so many others do.
My daughter would love this -- oh, who am I kidding? I love this! It's pretty and elegant. Lovely alliteration in "sheen, shining, shimmering" and "following fine figure" (small typo in that line, by the way, and also "midriff"). You've hidden a few little rhymes in this without making them obtrusive, so it's clear you have a good ear. Sound can make or break a poem.
So, great sounds and a very clear, delightful image -- in a world underground, this is almost a rebellion, and I do love an authentic voice.
My daughter would love this -- oh, who am I kidding? I love this! It's pretty and elegant. Lovely alliteration in "sheen, shining, shimmering" and "following fine figure" (small typo in that line, by the way, and also "midriff"). You've hidden a few little rhymes in this without making them obtrusive, so it's clear you have a good ear. Sound can make or break a poem.
So, great sounds and a very clear, delightful image -- in a world underground, this is almost a rebellion, and I do love an authentic voice.
18th May 2011 6:06am
Fixed.
Thank you so much for the kind words. I am not quite "underground", but I have always been rebellious. :)
This really meant a lot to me, thank you.
Thank you so much for the kind words. I am not quite "underground", but I have always been rebellious. :)
This really meant a lot to me, thank you.
9th May 2011 11:33pm
this is sweet how you were able to discribe it...it felt like i was drawing a picture and i saw the exact detail you know its sweet...
18th May 2011 6:07am
Drawing a picture, hmmm..... It does need a picture.
I am glad that you enjoyed it, thank you.
I am glad that you enjoyed it, thank you.
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11th Jul 2012 8:45pm
"Marysanna" is a unique name that flows sweet.
I love the color and definition you bring to life.
I love the color and definition you bring to life.
15th Jul 2012 2:07am
Thank you! She is a character I would have in a book now, if I had the focus.
