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Twister suit
Come on daddy let’s play a little game
A game that would make mommy go insane
Mommy are you ready for the twister suits?
All you have to do is spin till daddy shoots
Left hand blue bottom
Right hand green thigh
Oh daddy this game
Makes me want you to never say goodbye
Lips to red crotch
Red Crotch to yellow pie
Now mommy lets finish
Before daddy’s friend becomes diminish
A game that would make mommy go insane
Mommy are you ready for the twister suits?
All you have to do is spin till daddy shoots
Left hand blue bottom
Right hand green thigh
Oh daddy this game
Makes me want you to never say goodbye
Lips to red crotch
Red Crotch to yellow pie
Now mommy lets finish
Before daddy’s friend becomes diminish
Published 19th Jan 2015
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19th Jan 2015 9:05pm
This is very disturbing if I'm reading this the right way, and forgive me if I'm not. The daddy in question is apparently abusing a child who's too young to understand what he's doing. The child thinks it's just a game played until "daddy's friend becomes diminish." I hope this isn't something you went through. This is really excellent work, Lana.
20th Jan 2015 6:12am
Sorry no not really the idea I was going for, but interresting interpretation. This poem started off with a challenge, but I did not enter it regarding word count etc. It was inspired by the aloof...(cant remember the full name) challenge. It was writing an erotic poem with child friendly words. So I took the idea maybe a little too literally. Making it into a playfull game between mommy and daddy...
20th Jan 2015 4:03pm
21st Jan 2015 6:04am
I hadn't read the title when I started reading this, so I was a little disturbed until the "twist" I see what you did there, clever :)
21st Jan 2015 1:56pm
