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Your love, as a Metaphor
This little earth of my mine
Never quakes anymore.
I am lumbering
In a dead land
Where the land and sky
Cracks and aches
Parched and stripped
As dry and swollen as a corpses lips.
It seems so long ago
That I was forced to let you go
And wander deadpan
Into these vacant dead lands
Where your touch is as rare
As the song
Of a bird.
Never quakes anymore.
I am lumbering
In a dead land
Where the land and sky
Cracks and aches
Parched and stripped
As dry and swollen as a corpses lips.
It seems so long ago
That I was forced to let you go
And wander deadpan
Into these vacant dead lands
Where your touch is as rare
As the song
Of a bird.
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Re: Your love, as a Metaphor
Anonymous
16th Jan 2015 4:48pm
oh goodness. such heartbreak and hurt and....desire in this little write. good one. very good.
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16th Jan 2015 4:51pm
Re: Your love, as a Metaphor
16th Jan 2015 4:53pm
so much pain in this love poem.. I feel your ache.. excellent expression of emotion with love Crim
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16th Jan 2015 5:13pm
Re: Your love, as a Metaphor
Anonymous
16th Jan 2015 5:10pm
Beautiful, yet heart wrenching.. Emotions are just pouring out of this one.. great write.. thanks for sharing..
Dave
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re: Re: Your love, as a Metaphor
16th Jan 2015 9:38pm
Re: Your love, as a Metaphor
Anonymous
16th Jan 2015 6:43pm
The last line, "As the song of a bird" is a wonderful contrast to the wasteland imagery. Great write!
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Re: Your love, as a Metaphor
16th Jan 2015 7:24pm
Another powerful, significantly deep poem from you Virginia. I always look forward to your poems. This is dark and raw, and your mastery of imagery is really impressive. You paint a harsh picture of pain and longing. I hope you aren't feeling this harshness for long. Lovely poem though.
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16th Jan 2015 8:17pm
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16th Jan 2015 8:35pm
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Re: Your love, as a Metaphor
16th Jan 2015 9:18pm
I feel for you wandering the terrain in that wasted land. You say "I was forced to let you go." So is the dead land the result of negligence from this lover, or your ongoing sadness? Will another lover restore life? You've got me thinking again, Virginia, and for that I'm grateful.
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Re: Your love, as a Metaphor
Anonymous
17th Jan 2015 10:20am
This is an excellent write my friend, understanding this empty feeling. Beautiful, raw ink, thanks for sharing lovely lady
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Re: Your love, as a Metaphor
17th Jan 2015 12:56pm
A sad and lonely place this dessert once called love where the bird has lost its bee and its song cried fowl when it was stung... jj
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