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Rare
Peach transience
betrays lust and loins.
Bite and suck,
those juices leave us
thirstier.
The fluttering timid
place the fruit basket
upon a pedestal,
then bemoan decay.
On the plane of real,
our crystal sanity plays
songs of the soul.
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Re: Rare
14th Jan 2015 6:10am
Re: Rare
Anonymous
14th Jan 2015 11:43am
Cant help seeing a painting before me,It is either about fruit,or about the female sensuality,I see both in them,Atakti...
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Re: Rare
14th Jan 2015 2:02pm
My friend,
Realistically...or metaphorically speaking, this piece entices the imagination, and stimulates the senses!
(Short)...sweet...complete...Precise, and powerful in it's presentation!
MMmmmm.....P E A C H--A--L I C I O U S !!!
Realistically...or metaphorically speaking, this piece entices the imagination, and stimulates the senses!
(Short)...sweet...complete...Precise, and powerful in it's presentation!
MMmmmm.....P E A C H--A--L I C I O U S !!!
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Re: Rare
14th Jan 2015 4:48pm
The placement of the fruit basket on the pedestal makes it impossible to enjoy them. This is a "song of the soul." Fine job, Atatki.
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Re: Rare
14th Jan 2015 5:14pm
Surrounded by that fruit, a poison lies within....either way we die....this is why we pick....I see this as your making choices....well played.
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Re: Rare
Anonymous
15th Jan 2015 1:03am
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Re: Rare
15th Jan 2015 1:34am
to be taken & enjoyed, rather than adored from a distance as immutable art: the orchard will harvest again.
true of the peach, true of sexual passion...
true of the peach, true of sexual passion...
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Re: Rare
Anonymous
15th Jan 2015 5:36pm
this feels so light ad gentle without sacrificing depth ad power...lovely work. I especially love the line about juices that make us thirstier..a great analogy.
talented lady :) shine on
talented lady :) shine on
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Re: Rare
18th Jan 2015 2:10am
Every peach's got a flaw or two, but a slightly bruised peach is my favourite anyway.. I hate it when the juice dribbles down my chin though. Ew.
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Re: Rare
29th May 2015 6:22pm