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LONGING
We met and saw each other
We hugged and rubbed our nose
Cheek to cheek
We talked for hours
Her lips got dried and mine pale
We approached closer
face to face
lips to lips
breath to breath
She was satisfied
And I filled
Our lips wet, moist, and red..
We hugged and rubbed our nose
Cheek to cheek
We talked for hours
Her lips got dried and mine pale
We approached closer
face to face
lips to lips
breath to breath
She was satisfied
And I filled
Our lips wet, moist, and red..
Published 19th Dec 2014
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19th Dec 2014 5:27pm
"Our lips wet, moist, and red." This after "her lips got dried and mine pale." Nothing wrong with two lovers nurturing each other. That's what it's all about, right? Fine job, naked soul.
19th Dec 2014 5:40pm
this poem has some very different imagery. The initial description of lips, though obviously engaging in a lot of talk, is not overtly sexy. But then, before the kiss they become very colorful and sensual. I like this poem for the dichotomy of images.
19th Dec 2014 8:54pm
Thank you so much for such beautiful words of encouragement.. l'm immensely happy that my poems have some great readers. Thanks!!
