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Bountiful Offering
Fill me with your mundane tasks
Burden me with your yoke
Let me toil in silence
As I drink from your words
Share with me your dreams
Tell me your destinations
Let me walk beside you
As I commit to your cause
Take from me my muscles
Leave me weak in your presence
Let me lend my strength
As I shield you in my arms
Receive from me my blood
Adorn yourself in crimson splendour
Let our essences mingle
As we forge and bind this love
Burden me with your yoke
Let me toil in silence
As I drink from your words
Share with me your dreams
Tell me your destinations
Let me walk beside you
As I commit to your cause
Take from me my muscles
Leave me weak in your presence
Let me lend my strength
As I shield you in my arms
Receive from me my blood
Adorn yourself in crimson splendour
Let our essences mingle
As we forge and bind this love
Published 14th Dec 2014
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14th Dec 2014 12:19pm
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14th Dec 2014 8:03pm
Thank you Gabriel.
Words spawned whilst sitting beside a pool watching my daughter swim - struck by the muse?
Words spawned whilst sitting beside a pool watching my daughter swim - struck by the muse?
14th Dec 2014 2:30pm
14th Dec 2014 8:04pm
Thanks Poet
Still not sure about the last stanza - I feel it a little cliche or contrite... but it seemed to fit at the time.
Still not sure about the last stanza - I feel it a little cliche or contrite... but it seemed to fit at the time.
15th Dec 2014 2:57am
15th Dec 2014 6:56am
Franko - Sometimes a poet is momentarily forced out of the box and made to see a perspective that draws on different strengths to write the words which bring a different vision. Sometimes all it takes is sitting by a pooside and watching the young play. Strange how inspiration comes from the most unlikely of places. Most enjoyed the 'bountiful offering' Franko. Namyh
15th Dec 2014 7:28pm
Thank you Namyh.
I very much agree with you - this certainly started as something with different intentions, but ended up in a very pleasing place.
thank you for reading, and your wise words.
I very much agree with you - this certainly started as something with different intentions, but ended up in a very pleasing place.
thank you for reading, and your wise words.
19th Dec 2014 7:52am
"Let me walk beside you / As I commit to your cause" - wonderful proclamation of love. You have expressed a deep and consummate love for this special person. Thank you, Franko.
19th Dec 2014 8:23am
