Passer-by - Senryu

Great ink, Miss Chi! The ancient neoterics would have gone green with envy. :-)

Thanks a lot, sodium589 :-),
for lumping me together
with ancient neoterics :-)
although the haiku/senryu form's
not a new style :-).
 

oh well, even bit players
have their role, and they
tend to age better, since
they have fewer lines..:)

Well, maybe it's just that
you don't see them age
since they only play
guest parts :-).
Thanks, dear Paul :-).

Lovely truth and tell ....

Simple truths should be admitted regularly ...

I find this interesting mamacita.....food for thought.

It is at least reassuring, guapa :-)!

brief encounters sometimes form persistent memories, Chi. your poem is intriguing...

Deeply anchored in our memories they sometimes are, yes. Perhaps we should hoist anchors once in a while? Thanks, John, glad you you took the time to read and comment :-).

Honored to be a memento. :) you give great thought.

The poem - not very deep but the experience ... unerasable. Thanks, dear Pish!

Love the word "futurity" ... I'm not sure if you were going for the "traditional" 5-7-5 but if you were that second line is one beat too many ... I'd drop "My" ...

... You should check out "Haiku Journal"

http://haikujournal.org/submit/terms.php

I think you have some pieces that would fit beautifully there, they've published two of mine - and the books are well crafted.

This piece is certainly the type of senryu they like.

Salud

Ha! LSP, thanks for counting! I counted the syllables various times but the second line's syllable overhang escaped me totally! Perhaps because I was so smitten with "futurity", too! Thanks a lot for telling me!!! I'm looking for another solution.  
 
Also thanks a lot for the link! I feel honored that you think some of my haiku/senryu worthy to be published there *blush*. I'm not surprised that they published some of yours since yours are really perfect and an enrichment.  
 
In one of your comments you showed me another two of your haiku of a series ... Was looking for them yesterday since I wanted to comment on them but am lost in the tangled mass of comments and entries... Can you give me a hint, please? I liked them a lot!

http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/185718-/

With these winter haiku I experimented with not using 5-7-5

http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/184590-winter-haiku-volume-i/

http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/184593-winter-haiku-volume-2/

WOW! Thanks a lot!
I saw those with the none 575 and asked myself if we could see them as real haiku/senryu since the meter is crucial?

I'll file them (can I say that or is it just colloquial?) precious little gems of yours ...

Whoa, that felt a tad bit harsh!
but far be it for me to judge lol
Still, as always you pack in a lot
with so few words... Brava :)

If it felt a bit harsh then it's perfect :-).
My parents should have called me barb(ie) wire :-).

And if I succeeded to pack in a lot, I'd be very satisfied, Poe. Thank you, as always, for sharing your thoughts. I appreciate you a lot!

Ha!
Love it...
The attitude eminates...brilliant, as always 😊

It is important to keep those things apart. Men have been doing that since the dawn of mankind :-). Thank you, dear JeJe for your lovely comment! x

Huh...would love to have both lol
Cool write Miss Chi😉

So would I, Sadsmiles :-). Thanks for your refreshing comment!

Your talent to put years of memories into three lines amazes me. Loved it!

Thanks forever_young, your comment makes me glad :-). Perhaps there isn't much to remember? No, there is, just kidding!

Ha ha....you tramp! Lol

TRAMP??? Don't even have a tramp stamp :-).

I enjoyed your piece :) very well written

Glad you enjoyed since your opinion is as always very valuable for me :-).