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tarot cards only work in the rain
there are seven turkey buzzards
set out on the cellphone tower
silhouetting the lime green lined
grey light to the day
I am on the road named so for the tower
the one with seven vultures
perched in the shock and awe orange
that cross hatches its crisp white facade
Tesla is in the temperature today
and I still haven't thanked her
for the other side
to all these apologies
might be that a man must allow
a woman her misery
for him to remain in focus
the poetry of the soft muse betrays her
she is what fills the pens
with stiff drink
making the wharf rats work
extra hard for spare charcoal
market my appreciation in agony my love
and ask no less of an artist ever
than to lay their severed head
on a plate made of the silver
that fits your insatiable fancy
might be that a man must deny
that she torched the entire village
when she allows him a cot to inch naps on
Published 5th Oct 2014
| Edited 9th Oct 2014
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Anonymous
6th Oct 2014 2:12am
Truewf wryte meester baron o lyte
6th Oct 2014 3:54pm
6th Oct 2014 4:28pm
nice job, LB. I see you’ve already edited the bit in the first stanza that I was going to suggest and I’m sure the title is three letters shorter
anyhow, remarkable language: Telsa is in the temperature , plus the whole stanza that found it’s was unto the 20 word to name but a few.
’insatiable fancy’ is that a really nice way of saying something a bit more sinister, I suppose there could easily some dark veins helping to pump the pulse of the poem overall, certainly overall a great read.
good stuff
anyhow, remarkable language: Telsa is in the temperature , plus the whole stanza that found it’s was unto the 20 word to name but a few.
’insatiable fancy’ is that a really nice way of saying something a bit more sinister, I suppose there could easily some dark veins helping to pump the pulse of the poem overall, certainly overall a great read.
good stuff
Sweet, thanks for sticking w me here Dealiest of Craics.
Think my editing is getting much stronger, just gotta remember to do some before posting :-)
read this right as rain man, which I m gonna take as a compliment.
Thank ya sir
Think my editing is getting much stronger, just gotta remember to do some before posting :-)
read this right as rain man, which I m gonna take as a compliment.
Thank ya sir
14th Oct 2014 3:19pm
Vivid imagery, LB. Once again your mad skill at being a true artist is on display with the deep layers of awesome insights. "might be that a man must allow a woman her misery
for him to remain in focus," is an incredible line.
Beautifully written !
for him to remain in focus," is an incredible line.
Beautifully written !
15th Oct 2014 00:15am
