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After a long and insatiable relationship with w weartharming beautiful woman, than a thick-in-the-right places far and nasty bitch..
Published 26th Sep 2014
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- Edited 30th Sep 2014 9:32pm
30th Sep 2014 8:55pm
This is an incomplete sentence, unless you intend the title to be part of the sentence. No caps on the "a" in "after".
the lone "w" before "weartharming" adds as much emotional impact as a dead upside down fly.
Missing hyphen between "right" and "places".
Missing "rather" before "than".
As for "weartharming", it may mean more to a doctor than DUP readers. Perhaps changing to "heartwarming" and adding a comma would make it better understood by the average reader.
You want us to spare compliments and kick the shit out of your poetry. You got it straight up; straighten up your work as well by proofreading and correcting before submitting.
I hope you feel better.
the lone "w" before "weartharming" adds as much emotional impact as a dead upside down fly.
Missing hyphen between "right" and "places".
Missing "rather" before "than".
As for "weartharming", it may mean more to a doctor than DUP readers. Perhaps changing to "heartwarming" and adding a comma would make it better understood by the average reader.
You want us to spare compliments and kick the shit out of your poetry. You got it straight up; straighten up your work as well by proofreading and correcting before submitting.
I hope you feel better.
2nd Oct 2014 9:17pm
I cannot possibly summon the ability to give a fuck for you or your opinion Artina.
17th Jun 2015 10:33pm
