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Sick and sin
To Mailee
Through thick and thin and sick and sin
All right
So here's the deal
You're my best friend
In all the land
We've been through it
Been through the bad
The good stuff too
We've had loads of fun
We'll have lots more
In days to come
The bad is sure to rear its ugly face
Yet we always manage to come through with love if not entirely grace
I'm missing you
I think, mayhap, you miss me too
So, remember this, please, when you can
I'm here, friend, sister, your ever-loyal fan
Through thick and thin and sick and sin
Through thick and thin and sick and sin
All right
So here's the deal
You're my best friend
In all the land
We've been through it
Been through the bad
The good stuff too
We've had loads of fun
We'll have lots more
In days to come
The bad is sure to rear its ugly face
Yet we always manage to come through with love if not entirely grace
I'm missing you
I think, mayhap, you miss me too
So, remember this, please, when you can
I'm here, friend, sister, your ever-loyal fan
Through thick and thin and sick and sin
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Re: Sick and sin
Anonymous
7th Sep 2014 3:29am
Savaja, with the rhymes
Good stuff. Like the way this is structured.
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re: Re: Sick and sin
7th Sep 2014 4:38pm
Ahhh, SugarSkull, luv :-* ~
At least, I know I'm rhyming this time. :-p 'Tis a bit disconcerting when you point it out and I've not realized it...
Thank you, luv.
At least, I know I'm rhyming this time. :-p 'Tis a bit disconcerting when you point it out and I've not realized it...
Thank you, luv.
Re: Sick and sin
Anonymous
- Edited 7th Sep 2014 3:42am
7th Sep 2014 3:41am
Its amazing and fun to read with rhymes.
Its so serene.
I am sure the person for whom you have written this for will be smiling after reading this.
Its so serene.
I am sure the person for whom you have written this for will be smiling after reading this.
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re: Re: Sick and sin
7th Sep 2014 5:17pm
Thank you, Pamelajohn, luv! :-*
I'm pleased you enjoyed the rhyming.
It is my fondest hope this will bring a smile to her face and joy to her day...
Thank you, again, luv. :-*
I'm pleased you enjoyed the rhyming.
It is my fondest hope this will bring a smile to her face and joy to her day...
Thank you, again, luv. :-*
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Anonymous
8th Sep 2014 3:22am
It surely will :D
Thank yoi for such a beautiful write (:
♥
Thank yoi for such a beautiful write (:
♥
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Re: Sick and sin
Your recent personal poems are very readable and give insight into the mundane affairs of an amazing and brilliant person. I also want to compliment you on all your spoken word readings, a demanding art form in its own right.
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Thank you very much, candycrier, luv! :-*
You are so very kind and gracious to me, luv. Without your encouragement and Jack's, I might not have ventured to incorporate spoken word as an integral part of my poetry.
Thank you, luv, indeed. :-*
You are so very kind and gracious to me, luv. Without your encouragement and Jack's, I might not have ventured to incorporate spoken word as an integral part of my poetry.
Thank you, luv, indeed. :-*
Re: Sick and sin
Anonymous
7th Sep 2014 7:45am
Excellent wordplay! xo, Devlin.
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re: Re: Sick and sin
7th Sep 2014 5:34pm
Re: Sick and sin
7th Sep 2014 4:48pm
A heartfelt poem of deep and genuine friendship. Struck a chord with me, Savaja. Wonderful!
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Thank you, Chiyo, luv! :-*
Yes, luv, this friendship is deep and abiding, true indeed. I am fortunate, so fortunate, luv... :-*
I am deeply heartened this struck that chord with you, luv, who feels so deeply and writes such heartfelt, evocative verse. :-*
Yes, luv, this friendship is deep and abiding, true indeed. I am fortunate, so fortunate, luv... :-*
I am deeply heartened this struck that chord with you, luv, who feels so deeply and writes such heartfelt, evocative verse. :-*
re: re: Re: Sick and sin
7th Sep 2014 5:47pm
Wish I had your gift - not only of writing such gems but also of creating so lovely replies :-) ... Thank you!
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Re: Sick and sin
7th Sep 2014 7:16pm
re: Re: Sick and sin
7th Sep 2014 7:24pm
Thank you very much, Gahddess_Worship, luv! :-*
Devoted friendship it certainly is, luv - truer words have yet to be spoken... :-*
Devoted friendship it certainly is, luv - truer words have yet to be spoken... :-*
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8th Sep 2014 2:34am
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8th Sep 2014 3:24am
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9th Sep 2014 00:14am
it turns out i have bronchitis...so am pumped with antibiotics at the moment and slowly recuperating...a friend stayed over Saturday night and mixed me a concoction similar to yours...yeah, it hit the spot but the next day i came crashing down....sometimes you just need to do what the Dr says.... :)
thanks for asking....
thanks for asking....
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re: re: re: Re: Sick and sin
9th Sep 2014 00:31am
I understand, luv. Follow doctor's orders; it may offer some relief to also drink the lemon mixture. Still rest and let others pamper you awhile, luv. :-*
Bronchitis is invariably my body's way of enforcing rest when I ignore the need. :-p Even SuperBITCHpowers need to recharge, luv. ;-*
Bronchitis is invariably my body's way of enforcing rest when I ignore the need. :-p Even SuperBITCHpowers need to recharge, luv. ;-*