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Confession
A corpse sat singing
Playing for some gold
Bodies stood waiting
Praying for their turn
Angels prodded kindly
Moving along the line
Sand was busily seeping
I couldn't mark the time
Doubts came creeping
Massaging mind and soul
The singer reluctantly abandoned
His pot of gold
(C) 2014 XMAR82 ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
Playing for some gold
Bodies stood waiting
Praying for their turn
Angels prodded kindly
Moving along the line
Sand was busily seeping
I couldn't mark the time
Doubts came creeping
Massaging mind and soul
The singer reluctantly abandoned
His pot of gold
(C) 2014 XMAR82 ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
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Re: Confession
24th Aug 2014 1:40am
sometimes leaving is good but other times being patient does reap its reward beautiful lesson♥
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Anonymous
24th Aug 2014 7:59am
And such a creative confession this turned out to be, enjoyed the read!
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24th Aug 2014 8:31pm
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I am not sure I understood this piece as much as others but I did walk away feeling like the message was about giving up?
Funny I can actually picture a pot of gold shinning and a singer just getting up and saying, Screw you I'm outta here, who needs you gold pot full of riches!!!
Luv you!
Jackie
Funny I can actually picture a pot of gold shinning and a singer just getting up and saying, Screw you I'm outta here, who needs you gold pot full of riches!!!
Luv you!
Jackie
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25th Aug 2014 10:50pm
The pot of gold is heaven and we sing our sins for the prize. Thanks for reading Jackie.
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31st Aug 2014 10:04pm
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Anonymous
25th Aug 2014 00:56am
What a write! Connection with a luv is always more important than gold. Hope I got this right. LOL!!! Enjoyed! Xo :)
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31st Aug 2014 8:31pm
I saw it many ways dear friend...but i saw a cleansing of the soul the most. Isnt that what a true confession is for?
Hugs
Belle
Hugs
Belle
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31st Aug 2014 10:03pm
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16th Nov 2014 2:50am
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16th Nov 2014 4:19pm
It is about the song and dance we do to get into heaven. Our pot of gold. Stop in any time. You're always welcome here.
Anonymous
- Edited 11th Sep 2020 00:45am
22nd Dec 2014 5:39pm
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