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Trav'lin' song
Oh, and by the way, luv...
Be safe
As safe can be
Protect what's precious
illimitable riches
To me
Hit the road
Golgotha awaits
No pearly gates
Mayhap deviltry bates
Don't come back
Think wise serpent fates
Harmless doves
Okay, lost little loves
Never unpacked, fine unpack later
Penelope's no stranger
Probably ironic that
so iconic in fact
No time to dawdle
Be maudlin
Or coddle
Remember though:
Be safe
As safe can be
Protect what's precious
illimitable riches
To me
Be safe
As safe can be
Protect what's precious
illimitable riches
To me
Hit the road
Golgotha awaits
No pearly gates
Mayhap deviltry bates
Don't come back
Think wise serpent fates
Harmless doves
Okay, lost little loves
Never unpacked, fine unpack later
Penelope's no stranger
Probably ironic that
so iconic in fact
No time to dawdle
Be maudlin
Or coddle
Remember though:
Be safe
As safe can be
Protect what's precious
illimitable riches
To me
Published 15th Aug 2014
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15th Aug 2014 12:30pm
15th Aug 2014 1:02pm
Thank you very much, Granite, luv :-*.
From you, this is highest honor, indeed.
From you, this is highest honor, indeed.
15th Aug 2014 4:41pm
Memorable song! :) I loved how this piece had subtle sarcasm, yet it was framed in safe travlin wishes that it was hard to grasp your mood, so to speak... Xo
16th Aug 2014 9:38am
Ahhh, RainC, luv :-* ~
This is, in some ways, a somewhat cryptic song of travel with messages to be unpacked by someone quite special who should know all references made, luv. :-* If subtle sarcasm resides therein, which it may, trust me, it's full of love. :-*
This is, in some ways, a somewhat cryptic song of travel with messages to be unpacked by someone quite special who should know all references made, luv. :-* If subtle sarcasm resides therein, which it may, trust me, it's full of love. :-*
15th Aug 2014 7:39pm
It's sweet. Bidding someone precious goodbye and good wishes and a safe trip. Enjoyed.
16th Aug 2014 9:40am
You, xmar82, luv :-* are an incredibly astute and wise man and you are absolutely, 100% accurate!
Thank. You. :-*
Thank. You. :-*
16th Aug 2014 5:14am
An ambitious poem referencing the Greek legend of Penelope and Odysseus. I think it succeeds well in its brevity and modernity. Would love to have heard you improvise and sing those words. A simple declamatory reading doesn't cut it here. You are a fantastic singer, aren't you? O.K. Let's keep it a secret!
16th Aug 2014 9:49am
Candycrier, luv :-* ~
First, you are wonderful, you know that, don't you? :-* Yes, I did reference Penelope and Odysseus herein. :-*
Now, second, on to the singing, you ambitious man. :-p I thought of singing it, but I couldn't come up with something to suit it, especially since I was, rather rapidly, improvising. As far as fantastic singing is concerned - no, no, not that. Seriously. Just average. :-) And, that's enough.
First, you are wonderful, you know that, don't you? :-* Yes, I did reference Penelope and Odysseus herein. :-*
Now, second, on to the singing, you ambitious man. :-p I thought of singing it, but I couldn't come up with something to suit it, especially since I was, rather rapidly, improvising. As far as fantastic singing is concerned - no, no, not that. Seriously. Just average. :-) And, that's enough.
16th Aug 2014 3:03pm
16th Aug 2014 3:16pm
Thank you, Poetikmind (Erotic Ninja) luv :-*, very much!
You are such a master of cool, rhythmic smoothness that I am feeling very special here indeed, right now, luv. :-*
You are such a master of cool, rhythmic smoothness that I am feeling very special here indeed, right now, luv. :-*
17th Aug 2014 12:49pm
17th Aug 2014 1:39pm
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21st Aug 2014 8:33pm
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22nd Aug 2014 00:45am
That someone had better live to a very ripe old age, Jack Tex, luv :-*, if he knows what's best for him... :-*
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22nd Aug 2014 9:48am
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22nd Aug 2014 2:23pm
I beg to differ.
All of the people you've mentioned, here's the thing: no one can know this: what other greatnesses might they have accomplished had they lived longer lives, had their magnificence and often tortured genius thriven further, had optimal circumstances for further floration, growth, and development? None can know.
None. Can. Know.
I'll agree with you in one respect here: it's not about old age. You are absolutely correct about that. However, it is about seizing the most of every single moment allotted and living what life is granted well and fully and cognizant of the tremendous gift life really is because it is. Oh, it is. Even when it doesn't feel like it is, it is, luv. It so is. :-*
All of the people you've mentioned, here's the thing: no one can know this: what other greatnesses might they have accomplished had they lived longer lives, had their magnificence and often tortured genius thriven further, had optimal circumstances for further floration, growth, and development? None can know.
None. Can. Know.
I'll agree with you in one respect here: it's not about old age. You are absolutely correct about that. However, it is about seizing the most of every single moment allotted and living what life is granted well and fully and cognizant of the tremendous gift life really is because it is. Oh, it is. Even when it doesn't feel like it is, it is, luv. It so is. :-*
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22nd Aug 2014 2:50pm
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22nd Aug 2014 3:00pm
I think the thing that disturbs me about utilizing these particular examples is the idea that they lived to produce some great work then died once it was completed; I don't hold with that. They just died, no glory to the thing, rather tragically, in fact.
I think it's fallacious thinking to say they stuck around long enough to create the pinnacle of their existence then went out. It doesn't ring true, just rings hollow and like glory worship of an idealization.
I think it's fallacious thinking to say they stuck around long enough to create the pinnacle of their existence then went out. It doesn't ring true, just rings hollow and like glory worship of an idealization.
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22nd Aug 2014 3:29pm
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22nd Aug 2014 5:01pm
Hmmm...
Perhaps that was true for Sadegh Hedayat and even Tony Scott; I remain unconvinced for the others...
As far as obsession over life extension measures or living to be 900 without consideration of why or what for, that's macabre and tragic and gruesome and pathetic as far as I'm concerned.
Living merely to remain alive is no way to live at all. However, this notion of living only to create some great masterwork then dying or choosing to exist once it's complete is just as foolish and foolishly melodramatic in my book.
Perhaps that was true for Sadegh Hedayat and even Tony Scott; I remain unconvinced for the others...
As far as obsession over life extension measures or living to be 900 without consideration of why or what for, that's macabre and tragic and gruesome and pathetic as far as I'm concerned.
Living merely to remain alive is no way to live at all. However, this notion of living only to create some great masterwork then dying or choosing to exist once it's complete is just as foolish and foolishly melodramatic in my book.
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22nd Aug 2014 5:30pm
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23rd Aug 2014 00:15am
Touché on Robin Williams, luv.
Perhaps, I am being small-minded in this. I know not, but you have given me much to ponder.
Thank you, luv. :-*
Perhaps, I am being small-minded in this. I know not, but you have given me much to ponder.
Thank you, luv. :-*
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23rd Aug 2014 7:46am
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