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Passion and Pain
They're not just some words to be stolen
But the meter beating within my heart
On the pages of my passion
Spilled while the wounds were still left open
In black and white and deepest red bled the colors of my art
So it's not surprising you can't understand
Your claim upon my imagery is creative thievery
While your sleight of hand reveals your warped dishonesty
You shout imitation is the sincerest form of flattery
But if that is true why wear a mask to conceal your robbery
It's not enough to later say you admire my painted words
Writing means much more to me than flushing defecated words
They are all I have experienced in passion and in pain
They are everything that healed my mind and all that kept me sane
We may share all of our feelings in similar shades of ink
But my poems ownership still belongs to me
Yet through all of that you can still borrow my verse
Each time you read my poetry
But the meter beating within my heart
On the pages of my passion
Spilled while the wounds were still left open
In black and white and deepest red bled the colors of my art
So it's not surprising you can't understand
Your claim upon my imagery is creative thievery
While your sleight of hand reveals your warped dishonesty
You shout imitation is the sincerest form of flattery
But if that is true why wear a mask to conceal your robbery
It's not enough to later say you admire my painted words
Writing means much more to me than flushing defecated words
They are all I have experienced in passion and in pain
They are everything that healed my mind and all that kept me sane
We may share all of our feelings in similar shades of ink
But my poems ownership still belongs to me
Yet through all of that you can still borrow my verse
Each time you read my poetry
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Re: Passion and Pain
10th Aug 2014 12:10pm
Re: Passion and Pain
10th Aug 2014 1:42pm
Frustrating when someone claims our work for theirs, Poetryman. Relatable read.
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10th Aug 2014 2:31pm
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Re: Passion and Pain
11th Aug 2014 2:36pm
I love the opening lines:
They're not just some words to be stolen
But the meter beating within my heart
On the pages of my passion
Spilled while the wounds were still left open
In black and white and deepest red bled the colors of my art
Overall the poem is a remarkable showing of frustration against plagiarists, yet still compassionate in some ways to the extent of sharing your verses.
As long as you got them registered with the US Library of Congress which I think you always do, there's no need for worries JJ.
They're not just some words to be stolen
But the meter beating within my heart
On the pages of my passion
Spilled while the wounds were still left open
In black and white and deepest red bled the colors of my art
Overall the poem is a remarkable showing of frustration against plagiarists, yet still compassionate in some ways to the extent of sharing your verses.
As long as you got them registered with the US Library of Congress which I think you always do, there's no need for worries JJ.
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re: Re: Passion and Pain
11th Aug 2014 5:18pm
Thanks for commenting EBV! There are those who think the Lo c reg is a waste of time, but if your work ever gets stolen, as my brothers did, a court will not decide in your favor without it but they are compelled to find in your favor if you are lucky enough to have some other acceptable for of copyright, such as mailing it to yourself and having the sealed envelop with a post mark in it, but you will get no money. They only award you money if you have it officially copyright registered with the LoC. My brother did not and a famous band made millions on a hit single he wrote. They gave him nothing. Totally changed my opinion of them and made me cover my own ads. It's not hard to do and if you put them all in one collection you only have to pay for that collection. Fortunately I now have a publisher making my books for me that takes care or the registration. But I did my own before the books got published over ten years ago. Now every time I revise the books it gets done immediately. You can never be too careful, especially if someone perceives value in your work. JJ
Re: Passion and Pain
15th Aug 2014 7:26am
I love this work, Poetryman, luv :-* ~
When I came by the first time and read it, I loved it and now upon rereading it, I still do and perhaps more yet, luv, for you speak to the heart of things.
Poetry is deeply personal: for me, at least, an outpouring of the soul. It wells forth no matter how seemingly trivial, it is intrinsic to me, emanating from deep within. Sometimes, it feels birthed from my marrow or torn from depths I did not know I contained...
You speak to this so eloquently and evocatively. Thank you, luv. :-*
When I came by the first time and read it, I loved it and now upon rereading it, I still do and perhaps more yet, luv, for you speak to the heart of things.
Poetry is deeply personal: for me, at least, an outpouring of the soul. It wells forth no matter how seemingly trivial, it is intrinsic to me, emanating from deep within. Sometimes, it feels birthed from my marrow or torn from depths I did not know I contained...
You speak to this so eloquently and evocatively. Thank you, luv. :-*
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re: Re: Passion and Pain
15th Aug 2014 12:11pm
Thank you Savaja, I appreciate you very kind comment. I have been writing about my feelings for poetry ever since I started writing it. Some others I have posted here that you might like on the topic are:
Death Of A Virgin
Artificial Artists (State Of The Art)
Artificial Artists (X-Reprise)
Tragedy
Artists Are Lonely
Philosophy Therefore Poetry
Evolution of Expression
Where Is My Muse?
Poet No More (prose)
Nobody Becomes an Artist
Death Of A Virgin
Artificial Artists (State Of The Art)
Artificial Artists (X-Reprise)
Tragedy
Artists Are Lonely
Philosophy Therefore Poetry
Evolution of Expression
Where Is My Muse?
Poet No More (prose)
Nobody Becomes an Artist
Re: Passion and Pain
15th Aug 2014 5:11pm
I read this in the comp and thought you nailed it!
I love how passionately you pen, no matter the topic.
"They're not just some words to be stolen
But the meter beating within my heart
On the pages of my passion
Spilled while the wounds were still left open
In black and white and deepest red bled the colors of my art"<---Powerful! My favorite part...Xo
I love how passionately you pen, no matter the topic.
"They're not just some words to be stolen
But the meter beating within my heart
On the pages of my passion
Spilled while the wounds were still left open
In black and white and deepest red bled the colors of my art"<---Powerful! My favorite part...Xo
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15th Aug 2014 5:26pm
Re: Passion and Pain
24th Aug 2014 1:33am
loved those beginning words that stamp out and set the tone, then this line continued to haunt me long after..
'Yet through all of that you can still borrow my verse "
simply sublime......sigh
'Yet through all of that you can still borrow my verse "
simply sublime......sigh
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24th Aug 2014 3:52am