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It's all alright
this feels unfinished but I'm not sure where to go with it so any criticism or advice is greatly appreciated. I'm not usually one to post in this section :P
I build my dreams upon the sand
Watch as they sift through my hands
Where my castle was, now nothing stands
But it's all alright
The sun feels hot against my skin
I sweat though my clothes are thin
The water beckons and I give in
But it's all alright
The water rises up over my toes
Wade out as far as I dare to go
Happiness swells inside my soul
And it's all alright
I dry off and lay back on the ground
Watch the sky as the sun goes down
Feeling at peace, safe and sound
It was all alright
Even when your dreams get washed away
Even when the words are too hard to say
Even if you are alone and you are afraid
It's all alright
I build my dreams upon the sand
Watch as they sift through my hands
Where my castle was, now nothing stands
But it's all alright
The sun feels hot against my skin
I sweat though my clothes are thin
The water beckons and I give in
But it's all alright
The water rises up over my toes
Wade out as far as I dare to go
Happiness swells inside my soul
And it's all alright
I dry off and lay back on the ground
Watch the sky as the sun goes down
Feeling at peace, safe and sound
It was all alright
Even when your dreams get washed away
Even when the words are too hard to say
Even if you are alone and you are afraid
It's all alright
Published 1st Aug 2014
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1st Aug 2014 1:08pm
1st Aug 2014 1:36pm
Thank you :) simple can be good sometimes, I appreciate the comment ^.^
5th Nov 2016 5:40pm
I like it the way it stands also it's always good to try something a bit different. I feel it enriches and expands your work. Another amazing write Esoteric. Respectfully,
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