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Unsatisfied
I don't want
A lot of talk
Tonight
No
Discussion
All right?
Let's not
Dilly or dally
Bury yourself
Deeply
As
Soon as possible
I won't be able to
Think
Until you do
I crave and I ache
I pulse and I shudder
I quake
Oh
Fill me
With
You
Slake
This raging fire in me
This tempest
I can't contain
I've
Played myself
over and over
Plunging this pseudo
Substitute
For you
Into me
Over and over
Again and again
Is
Not
Enough
I cannot hope
To placate
The demands of my
Frenzy
With this
Toy
Come now
Sink
Into
My
Dark
Pink
Recalescent
Liquescent
Syncopation
A lot of talk
Tonight
No
Discussion
All right?
Let's not
Dilly or dally
Bury yourself
Deeply
As
Soon as possible
I won't be able to
Think
Until you do
I crave and I ache
I pulse and I shudder
I quake
Oh
Fill me
With
You
Slake
This raging fire in me
This tempest
I can't contain
I've
Played myself
over and over
Plunging this pseudo
Substitute
For you
Into me
Over and over
Again and again
Is
Not
Enough
I cannot hope
To placate
The demands of my
Frenzy
With this
Toy
Come now
Sink
Into
My
Dark
Pink
Recalescent
Liquescent
Syncopation
Published 27th Jul 2014
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Anonymous
27th Jul 2014 4:10am
This is excellent work of longing, hottt damn. Love the rhyme schemes and flow! Need more, now
27th Jul 2014 8:59pm
Thank you SugarSkull, luv :-* ~
It would probably be wrong to admit at this point how incredibly unaware I was of a rhyme scheme I was when I wrote this, right? :-p :::sheepishly admits:::
I can take no credit for that, luv. It just flowed out of me. Now, the longing portion of things... ;-)
It would probably be wrong to admit at this point how incredibly unaware I was of a rhyme scheme I was when I wrote this, right? :-p :::sheepishly admits:::
I can take no credit for that, luv. It just flowed out of me. Now, the longing portion of things... ;-)
27th Jul 2014 5:32am
Reminds me of times I couldn't wait to have mi reina ... She barely walked through the door and I devoured her on the spot like she was the lunch I'd missed at work that day ...
You've certainly captured a moment all can relate to.
You've certainly captured a moment all can relate to.
27th Jul 2014 9:05pm
Ah, LobodeSanPedro, luv :-* ~
This admission is as searing as the poem! Lord, man! I can just imagine you devouring her...
Ayyyy, caliente!!!
This admission is as searing as the poem! Lord, man! I can just imagine you devouring her...
Ayyyy, caliente!!!
27th Jul 2014 6:06am
Damn you're good Savaja.....
'Plunging this pseudo substitute.....' can only suffice so much.... :)
'Plunging this pseudo substitute.....' can only suffice so much.... :)
27th Jul 2014 9:08pm
Thank you, GeniusGirl, luv :-* ~
You're pretty damn good yourself! I had to check at first to see and no, no I didn't use those words, but I SHOULD have: can only suffice so much - right! Well said. Apt.
You're pretty damn good yourself! I had to check at first to see and no, no I didn't use those words, but I SHOULD have: can only suffice so much - right! Well said. Apt.
this reminds me so much my Ed's reaction to my little white dress lol
i love the sense of urgency evoked by this piece, beautiful oracle.
i love the sense of urgency evoked by this piece, beautiful oracle.
27th Jul 2014 9:12pm
Ah, Snowcrystal, luv :-* ~
A little white dress elicits an explosive reaction - verrrry nice, indeed - that perfect juxtaposition of naughty and nice.
Poor man, he's no defense against it, has he? ;-) You are a naughty vixen, aren't you? :-D Well done, luv! :-*
A little white dress elicits an explosive reaction - verrrry nice, indeed - that perfect juxtaposition of naughty and nice.
Poor man, he's no defense against it, has he? ;-) You are a naughty vixen, aren't you? :-D Well done, luv! :-*
27th Jul 2014 10:58am
27th Jul 2014 9:17pm
Thank you, PoetSpeak, luv :-* ~
You tempt me, greatly, with that appellation to name you Granite once again, yet I'll refrain...
Thank you, again - it is an age-old dance, this one of passion, is it not? ;-)
You tempt me, greatly, with that appellation to name you Granite once again, yet I'll refrain...
Thank you, again - it is an age-old dance, this one of passion, is it not? ;-)
27th Jul 2014 11:03pm
27th Jul 2014 11:10pm
Ahh, Granite, luv :-* ~
It suits you, to my mind: hard, unyielding, yet, yet...it has those crevices you know, that depth, water gets in, still waters run deep within, and it withstands all, does it not? :-*
To my mind, perfect, luv... Thank you, for indulging me.
It suits you, to my mind: hard, unyielding, yet, yet...it has those crevices you know, that depth, water gets in, still waters run deep within, and it withstands all, does it not? :-*
To my mind, perfect, luv... Thank you, for indulging me.
Anonymous
27th Jul 2014 3:20pm
Perfect as is.
Erotica done right.
Erotica done right.
27th Jul 2014 9:21pm
Thank you, greatly, Magnetron, luv :-* ~
It is a high compliment you pay of perfection and erotica done right. The muse was kind to me and you are as well, luv. :-*
It is a high compliment you pay of perfection and erotica done right. The muse was kind to me and you are as well, luv. :-*
27th Jul 2014 3:33pm
27th Jul 2014 9:22pm
Thank you, taito-10, luv :-* ~
You are most kind and generous to say this, especially with such extensive knowledge of Tantra as you have.
You are most kind and generous to say this, especially with such extensive knowledge of Tantra as you have.
27th Jul 2014 3:36pm
27th Jul 2014 9:25pm
Ahhh, Rossetta, luv :-* ~
I feel you. You feel me too. We are kindred spirits, perhaps, luv. :-*
Thank you for seeing me and seeing yourself in my poetry too.
As many have stated, we are all interconnected...
I feel you. You feel me too. We are kindred spirits, perhaps, luv. :-*
Thank you for seeing me and seeing yourself in my poetry too.
As many have stated, we are all interconnected...
27th Jul 2014 6:42pm
to write erotica w/o the obvious hardcore references would make it seem subtle, but there is nothing subtle here. the lady's desires are perfectly lucid. excellent expression.
let it be lingering & recalescent...
let it be lingering & recalescent...
27th Jul 2014 9:30pm
Ah, JohnFeddeler, luv :-* ~
Thank you for your complexity of thought and depth of expression. You are correct, absolutely. To take what is hidden, expose it utterly, yet without shame, wholly, passionately, thoroughly, with abandon, neglecting no illumination was my goal here.
Thank you for seeing with such clarity, luv. :-*
Thank you for your complexity of thought and depth of expression. You are correct, absolutely. To take what is hidden, expose it utterly, yet without shame, wholly, passionately, thoroughly, with abandon, neglecting no illumination was my goal here.
Thank you for seeing with such clarity, luv. :-*
27th Jul 2014 10:08pm
Love the message, "No substitute for the real thing." Human interaction is a must. Awesome write.
27th Jul 2014 10:40pm
Ah, xmar82, luv :-* ~
Thank you, indeed, for heading directly for the truth of the matter. :-*
Human interaction, human contact in some of its purest, finest form if done right; there is no better elixir...
Thank you, indeed, for heading directly for the truth of the matter. :-*
Human interaction, human contact in some of its purest, finest form if done right; there is no better elixir...
27th Jul 2014 11:02pm
Yea the longing, n silent suffering of a deep seeded need for ultimate pleasure is surely relateable! Lol wowzers very hott lol
27th Jul 2014 11:14pm
Thank you, Erotic Ninja, luv :-* ~
Coming from you, a veritable master of the torrid, scorching, blaze, these are high accolades indeed! I now count myself quite accomplished to have burnt you, luv. ;-)
Coming from you, a veritable master of the torrid, scorching, blaze, these are high accolades indeed! I now count myself quite accomplished to have burnt you, luv. ;-)
28th Jul 2014 4:45am
Oh so well put.....no toy can ever take the place of a REAL man.
Love it
Belle
Love it
Belle
Thank you, lilsouthernbelle, luv :-* ~
I am SO glad you concur. ;-) Nothing like men...
I am SO glad you concur. ;-) Nothing like men...
28th Jul 2014 7:29am
28th Jul 2014 7:43am
Oh lilsouthernbelle, luv :-* ~
I know better than to disagree with a Southern woman on matters concerning men... ;-)
I know better than to disagree with a Southern woman on matters concerning men... ;-)
Anonymous
28th Jul 2014 1:37pm
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28th Jul 2014 1:47pm
28th Jul 2014 1:56pm
I actually loved the rhyme in this, very well done. And you said it was natural so that's great...
Enjoyed...
Enjoyed...
28th Jul 2014 2:06pm
Thank you, Fireglacier, luv :-* ~
Would that I had known I had rhymed... :::sheepishness abounds:::
I can only give thanks to the muse...
Would that I had known I had rhymed... :::sheepishness abounds:::
I can only give thanks to the muse...
Anonymous
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29th Jul 2014 9:12pm
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29th Jul 2014 9:16pm
Thank you very much, Samantha, luv :-* ~
I find that I like very much that you find my voice pleasing to your ear...
I find that I like very much that you find my voice pleasing to your ear...
Man it takes forever to scroll down all of your comments :) You are well liked and for reason. This invitation to passion is awesome. You've taught me a new word, Recalescent, I love the definition...it's poetic and sexy "a brightening exhibited by cooling iron as
latent heat of transformation is liberated."
Well my bright iron now needs cooling ;)
latent heat of transformation is liberated."
Well my bright iron now needs cooling ;)
2nd Aug 2014 7:14am
Thank you, Gahddess_Worship, luv :-*.
I adore words; they open new vistas and they are ever adventures! :-D Glad I am to have shared with thee, luv. :-*
Ahhh, recalescent. And to think, I just so happen to have a place ideally suited...well, never mind. ;-)
I adore words; they open new vistas and they are ever adventures! :-D Glad I am to have shared with thee, luv. :-*
Ahhh, recalescent. And to think, I just so happen to have a place ideally suited...well, never mind. ;-)
2nd Aug 2014 3:31pm
Yet...
I fear such a bright iron would not find the cooling sought for, in truth, I can claim no such chilling place...
I fear such a bright iron would not find the cooling sought for, in truth, I can claim no such chilling place...
