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Got To Get A Message Through
I want the goddess to know
the unique essence she contains
because sometimes when thinking about her
the drain is the location of my brain
Like her to know that in the day
though many lovely ladies my pass my way
I would much prefer her touch
tender moments when we two can play
Wish she knew late at night
when intense needs hit like a brick wall
into her arms would be my first priority
her name that I always call
I want her to know that when the sun makes it's way
passing in that morning sky
that in my bed I long for her beside me
looking into those beautiful eyes
the unique essence she contains
because sometimes when thinking about her
the drain is the location of my brain
Like her to know that in the day
though many lovely ladies my pass my way
I would much prefer her touch
tender moments when we two can play
Wish she knew late at night
when intense needs hit like a brick wall
into her arms would be my first priority
her name that I always call
I want her to know that when the sun makes it's way
passing in that morning sky
that in my bed I long for her beside me
looking into those beautiful eyes
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Re: Got To Get A Message Through
16th Jul 2014 11:43am
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16th Jul 2014 2:21pm
Re: Got To Get A Message Through
16th Jul 2014 11:53am
title reminded me of that ol' BeeGee's number 'bout the mining disaster in some town or another
"the drain is the location of my brain " ..I dunno, Jazz. it probably makes a ton of sense to you
check ' it's way' first line last stanza
overall nice sentiments, handy enough to wrap ones head around
good stuff, man keep shinnin'
"the drain is the location of my brain " ..I dunno, Jazz. it probably makes a ton of sense to you
check ' it's way' first line last stanza
overall nice sentiments, handy enough to wrap ones head around
good stuff, man keep shinnin'
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re: Re: Got To Get A Message Through
yeah I was being cute with the phrase, "brain drain"
thanks for the comment and read
and yes I took the title from the Bee Gees but at least it wasn't from that AWFUL movie they did with Peter Frampton, using John, Paul, George, and Ringo's music :)
thanks for the comment and read
and yes I took the title from the Bee Gees but at least it wasn't from that AWFUL movie they did with Peter Frampton, using John, Paul, George, and Ringo's music :)
Re: Got To Get A Message Through
16th Jul 2014 2:35pm
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16th Jul 2014 8:18pm
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16th Jul 2014 9:43pm
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16th Jul 2014 10:17pm
Re: Got To Get A Message Through
16th Jul 2014 10:23pm
You got the words, just need to put'em to good use....
*get that message through*...... you don jon you... :)
Xo
*get that message through*...... you don jon you... :)
Xo
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re: Re: Got To Get A Message Through
16th Jul 2014 10:53pm
more to it then that---the typical Oregonian female with tats and metal everywhere has little appeal for me
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16th Jul 2014 11:33pm
...Imagine metal detectors...airports, libraries HA!!! What fun dates
*I want a tattoo of my whole body-but bigger- Steven Wright
*I want a tattoo of my whole body-but bigger- Steven Wright
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17th Jul 2014 2:20am
when a woman has more metal in her than a Sherman tank I say pass. Same thing with tats; a few, okay but when she starts looking like a lizard, heck no!
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17th Jul 2014 3:27am
Re: Got To Get A Message Through
16th Jul 2014 11:31pm
A feeling and rhythm beats through this Write Jazz...That Goddess is somewhere to be found!!!
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re: Re: Got To Get A Message Through
17th Jul 2014 2:21am
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Anonymous
17th Jul 2014 2:02am
Gorgeous write and tribute to one who is more than beautiful thru your eyes. Enjoyed! Xo :)
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17th Jul 2014 2:22am
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Anonymous
17th Jul 2014 2:27am
I can tell that.....it reads as if your words danced from your fingertips on to the page. Xo :)
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