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Whispers
She walks alone in the snow
he walks in her shadow
she dose not stop him
he did not beg
she does not lead
they didn’t pretend
She pulls in her breath
deeply
feelings pushed aside
completely
adjusting her dress ever so
neatly…
He staggers forward
She leans back
He clutches his heart
She touches hers
He whispers goodbye
She whispers
please die ...
Written by
Zazzles
(Broomie)
Published 2nd Jun 2014
| Edited 13th Jul 2024
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2nd Jun 2014 5:29am
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2nd Jun 2014 3:17pm
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OMG Crim ! It it so great to see you back, I have missed you so.
welcome back darling!Thanks for the read from me beautiful<3
Broomie
welcome back darling!Thanks for the read from me beautiful<3
Broomie
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2nd Jun 2014 8:08pm
Yes thank you Po I was feeling deviant last night.
thanks for the ink love my friend<3
Broom
thanks for the ink love my friend<3
Broom
Re: Whispers
2nd Jun 2014 9:22pm
Dark, defiantly so. Conjures up a few thoughts and images that be not thought or seen
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3rd Jun 2014 1:02am
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3rd Jun 2014 8:33am
This reminds me of a song i'd written once, for a great (and fake) "love" of mine...
title "i hope you die"...
Thanks for this powerful ink, it did bring back memories of amazing rage :)
title "i hope you die"...
Thanks for this powerful ink, it did bring back memories of amazing rage :)
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3rd Jun 2014 8:27pm
Yes I felt rage when I wrote it but a subtle type if you know what I mean, in loving spoonfuls of hate.
Broomie
Broomie
Re: Whispers
7th Jun 2014 6:50pm
Great write sweets!!
Love the read!!
Never let that pen go!!
Sir Lancelott
Love the read!!
Never let that pen go!!
Sir Lancelott
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7th Jun 2014 6:56pm
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Anonymous
19th Jun 2014 3:29am
The ending gripped me! What a twist.....great write. Mercy!! :)
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19th Jun 2014 3:47am
Hello ") Yeah I was in a mood when I wrote this
I love my husband to DEATH lol if you know what I mean ;) Thank you for the read I appreciated the time you take to read em..
Broomie
I love my husband to DEATH lol if you know what I mean ;) Thank you for the read I appreciated the time you take to read em..
Broomie
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Anonymous
9th Jul 2014 6:28am
sometimes darkness can be beautiful, nice write.
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10th Jul 2014 00:32am
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Anonymous
10th Jul 2014 1:32am
hello and likewise.
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Anonymous
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24th Feb 2015 6:25pm
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24th Feb 2015 7:04pm
You know it...
Yes love is a bitch sometimes....
Loves you
Zazzles
((((Willow xoxox))))))
Yes love is a bitch sometimes....
Loves you
Zazzles
((((Willow xoxox))))))
Re. Whispers
8th Mar 2016 3:34am
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8th Mar 2016 3:40am
BANG!
OH!!! HA! BINGO!!!!!
brownie points fer shure****
HE HO!!!!
Zazzles Mwah!
You fucker u u got it spot on!!!
OH!!! HA! BINGO!!!!!
brownie points fer shure****
HE HO!!!!
Zazzles Mwah!
You fucker u u got it spot on!!!
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8th Mar 2016 3:49am
they say the x in sex marks the spot...so i figured if i dug deep enough....:)
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18th Oct 2020 9:59pm