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Control Me
I’m not your marionette puppet
I will not dance,
The only strings you can tie to me
are to bind my hands...
Don’t try and impose yourself
emotionally I will bite,
Physically I don’t care for pain
Spank me all you like...
Grasp your hand around my throat
to stop the singing out,
My eyes will always watch you
break me if you might...
I am not the flavour that dissolves
with a flick of your tongue,
I will linger and permeate
Your livid soul long after I cum...
I will not dance,
The only strings you can tie to me
are to bind my hands...
Don’t try and impose yourself
emotionally I will bite,
Physically I don’t care for pain
Spank me all you like...
Grasp your hand around my throat
to stop the singing out,
My eyes will always watch you
break me if you might...
I am not the flavour that dissolves
with a flick of your tongue,
I will linger and permeate
Your livid soul long after I cum...
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Re: Control Me
1st May 2014 1:32am
I like "livid soul"...
there's an old punk
anthem by x ray spex,
"oh bondage, up yours!" which
you've just reminded me of..:)
there's an old punk
anthem by x ray spex,
"oh bondage, up yours!" which
you've just reminded me of..:)
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re: Re: Control Me
1st May 2014 1:51am
Yes! I know the song, they're on my playlist currently :) Thank you for the compliment x
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1st May 2014 7:51am
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Re: Control Me
1st May 2014 7:01am
Wow this was really crisp totally effective and to the point! I enjoyed reading from you.
Cheers
Zazzles
Cheers
Zazzles
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re: Re: Control Me
1st May 2014 7:52am
Thank you so much for your feedback, I generally don't write like this xx
Re: Control Me
Miss Glass, this is very different to any s&m themed erotica floating around the underground, most refreshing.
puppet and marionette on L1 is a tautology and not needed imho. you could drop one or the other and still keep your thoughts the same.
enjoyed xo
puppet and marionette on L1 is a tautology and not needed imho. you could drop one or the other and still keep your thoughts the same.
enjoyed xo
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re: Re: Control Me
1st May 2014 9:40am
Thank you for your feedback, you're right, one or the other would have been fine. Your RL add is a massive compliment from a talented writer if such content. Truly touched xx
Re: Control Me
1st May 2014 8:13am
wow, very sexy and s&m poem... I love especially the last stanza, with "Your livid soul long after I cum...". Enjoyed reading your poem.
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Re: Control Me
1st May 2014 1:43pm
This is a treat, the last stanza was great, set up nicely with the rest of the poem. Expressions of a submissive who truly understands her net worth.
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re: Re: Control Me
2nd May 2014 00:35am
Thank you, occasionally I surprise myself when it reaches out. Your support is touching x
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2nd May 2014 00:36am