un-

wow. Greatest...

hardly, but Thank you for saying so!

A very wistful poignant write lovely Opheliac :) with love Crim

Crim thank you!

I hold you in high esteem
ung lady
for no reason
except that I want to learn
what poetry is in minimum words

some compose epics
and reading them
my mind derails
pains my entrails

I hold you in those I follow
as my readers  

yes,
but only as my teacher  

you are the mistress of brevity
and I  
a dog greedy

Thank you Again. Your encouraging feedback keeps me going.
I have nothing to teach I'm afraid. Let your thoughts guide you however long or short they may be.

We all learn from each other
some day this you shall remember  
when the birds fly astray
and
again!
has gone away

this time finally

So do pray
the ultimate day
shall not stand in your way
finally!!!!!

What I find interesting here, is the concept of the word 'dream'. To be exact, when does a dream become a nightmare? At one point do the villains in our visions become the princesses we crave?

Then we discover that the villain is indeed a metaphor for the self and the piece takes on a whole new meaning. For me it becomes a signature of denial.

Forever the mental provocateur, Ophi.

Honoured to have you here Missy. That's a very interesting thought and thank you very much for sharing it. Since it's manifested in a dream it may signify some form of denial or suppressed emotion - employing Freud and Jung. But I like to keep an open mind and a wider horizon of interpretations.
Mental provocateur you say? I'm blushing!

How do you get so much into four lines?
I ramble for days and still can't express what I want to.
One of your lines only had two words as well,
but being your own worst enemy has never sounded better lol.
I may have accidentally memorised this.

let the thought leave a mark
as if a strongly brewed tea bag
stained your white porcelain.

that's my moto! The Longer the brewing process, the better. It helps you think, undo, redo and mentally rewrite your poems until the you've captured the thought itself.

am late to your brevity treat Ophie..n this is in your usual gr8 flair. dream's limitless visions are ironical to the realities many times. your usage of "poor" and "the needy" reminds me the poetry at large that are not focused on societal imbalances. same words fitting in at one's emotive levels n at almost any other planes...that only you can do I start believing now. the title's creativity n the way verses reveal that, inimitable! bows n much <3. xo:)

Uma, my dear, sorry for the late reply. Your interpretations are always welcome and in fact, i'm looking forward to them.
The 'poor' and 'needy' referred to the "I" of my unconscious- the one that causes the dreams.

High Fives*

*High Five* to you too

The first two lines are your masterpiece till date...teach me how to compose them?

I wish i knew how Anando! Thank you though, very much!

out of sight
out of mind one remains  
so does
again and again

awaiting poetry
does remain

patience is a fine virtue :)
thank you for waiting for my poetry. It means a lot

I only have two defects  
 
firstly  
 
I am a patient of patience  
 
secondly  
 
my ego envelops  me  
honey coated  
neither can I lick  
nor  be spared of it
 
so I shall await  
the coming  
of your unique poetry  
damned if I don't  
sinned If I do
 
just four lines  
condensed  
as sweetened nectar  
tis
 
a miraculous gift

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hopefully u will replace it
thanks lady

mind our heart

do read if u please